I realize there are no props for the Potion & Tablet of Truth items. I couldn't find any pics or decent vids to cut em from. The 1st one is supposed to represent Scorpion's trip through the Shaolin Temple in Mythologies, with a humorous twist.



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Here is Feudal Realms 24



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Khannel Skurfking... K 8



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lol I love these. Pretty clever use of the Jax fatality

Hahahaha, I really like the Khannel Skurfing ones. Great job, dude.

The moment I read the first line in the last Khannel, I lol'd for a few minutes

Man I like you Tetra Vega, I'm really sorry that I hate your comics so much.

I'll try to be constructive.
In general, I disliked the following things in the Khannel Surfing comics (I tried reading Feudal Realms but I had no idea what was going on since I hadn't read the ones before so I stopped):

a) Visually everything's lame. The text is unappealing and it's not really that obvious what line belongs to which character. There's virtually no action going on ever, so it's really just boring and dull to look at for the most part.

b) Nothing's even remotely funny.


Good luck improving.

Here is Feudal Realms 25

I'm sorry you feel that way Zentile :( Do you at least get the references?

Perhaps I stuffed too many in my comics.



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I don't think the quantity is the problem.
As far as being comic references, you'd probably get just as much out of the idea in a single panel as you would the full strip. The gag pretty much explains itself in a single image, the interaction between characters in those instances isn't adding a lot, and there isn't much else going on.

In both sets, I think there are definite pacing issues.

The other strips have a lot of words and characters doing not a whole lot. It all comes off a bit aimless and incoherrent, particularly when reading strips individually. It might be nice to try to give each installment a stronger conceptual punch, so it has a context to read well on it's own, even if it's a contributing part of a larger arc.

I would consider shaving dialogue down to what's important, thinking more about the flow between panels and how you can make it engaging on that level. That'll shorten the strips and hopefully tighten up the script of each. If you've plotted ahead, focus on hitting those targets clean and concise and with a lot of meat in the strip, without needlessly over serializing beats (ie; consolidate 24-25). I'd also resist the temptation to cram custom sprites in for the sake of getting them a viewing, and over choreographing fight sequences. What you don't get in now, might be useful at another point. It's better for the flow to just get to the point.

Already mentioned, cleaner more easy to read fonts would be a good upgrade, too. Might be cool to try to cook up a new format, particularly if you investigate free photoshop-lite clones, or some such.

I generally agree with Zentile's sentiments.
Thought I'd try to add some additional constructive ideas. These were some of the basic ideas I tried to use when tackling the idea of sprite strips (with mixed results).

Wow my thoughts 100% exactly.



Hey man at the end of the day, you just have to think about what you want out of these comics. Do you want to just kill some time while enjoying yourself? Do you want to make a few people giggle? Or do you want to work really hard, improve a lot and actually make Zentile and Mick-Lucifer laugh?
It's your call, you already have a bit of a following as I understand it, so if you're happy with that, stick with your formula. If not, reread Mick's post and work hard at getting better.

All my comics can be viewed at the Kombat Pavillion

I honestly don't see what your problem with the papyrus font is. I'm legally blind, and I can read it just fine. As for Khannel surfing, the title font represents a T.V.'s onscreen channel display. All the channel numbers are real channels relavent to the comic theme.

Comic panel flow is always(unless it's 1 panel wide, vertically):

12
34

Text is placed in order of reading, relevant to the scene, not necesserilly near who's talking. For unbubbled text, it's placed in areas where it's visible, without blocking visibility.

Perhaps it's the Autism, but all my comics make sense to me
All the sprites are placed with intent & purpose.

I'm sorry the mundane tasks of everyday life are too boring for you manic, adrenaline junkies. I'm not producing this years action packed Hollywood blockbuster here. I have to contend with real life issues that account for some of my several month long absences.

Thank you for your well thought out criticisms, it's nice to see familiar faces.



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It's the autism, because everything is visual shit to me (no offense).

Must be that newfangled HD kajigger

Yeah, I see the world on a whole other level. I'm also frustrated by how many Humans fail to comprehend sarcasm(irl). Now they even need machines to tone proof their messages?!

I'm a change the text font for KSK, but I'm keeping FR in it's current format. Title font is Viner Hand ITC, which I don't have on my laptop. So I had to make use of a site's sample feature. :( I like the calligraphy style.
Also the text font is Papyrus, 9pt. It's stylish, and the text bubbles are made to resemble scrolls, inspired by Final Fantasy Tactics.



Perhaps I'll retire after my 50th comic(FR26 is WIP)


You don't need shadows to tell where someone is, their smaller size(80%) as well as their location relative to objects assumed to be farther away, tend to give hints as to what's going on. They are NOT floating midgets



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Here are the 2 latest episodes of Feudal Realms.

Feudal Realms 26

Feudal Realms 27



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freakin awesome i luv em' keep up the good luck brotha

The Lin Kuei are certainly getting...boulder

I lol'd hard at this

Yeah, and it's technically a Reptile sprite too...

Here is Feudal Realms 28



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Here is Feudal Realms 29



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Just finished Khannel Skurfking... K 9



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TETRIS!!

Here is Feudal Realms 30



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