What's the joke? I hadn't seen the first comic before, and the same criticism applies; there's no structure at all. The visuals are AWESOME, 5/5 on that. Some cool concepts, but really there's just no structure at all to the jokes. There's hardly a punchline, or rather, a punchline acceptable these days. Keep trying just learn some writing techniques rather than just coming up with the dialogue and writing it in.
Yeah, the visuals were great. Love the flailing Johnny in the second one. Just work on the punchlines a little bit. 5/5 on the visuals, 4/5 whole comic considered.
