MK Mini Stories: A Lost Soul
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MK Mini Stories: A Lost Soul
09/08/2010 12:13 AM EDT
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09/08/2010 12:24 AM EDT
I already found a few spelling errors after re-reading this... Darn...
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09/08/2010 02:39 AM EDT
This looks good, I'm interested to see where you go with this. In the fan fiction in my head, I don't turn Frost into an evil character like most seem to do, so I'll be curious to see where you take this.
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09/08/2010 09:48 AM EDT
Thank you. I was a little stuck where to continue after this chapter was finished, but before I fell asleep last night, I had an interesting thought.

But, I'm working on different characters, so it'll be awhile for a continuation for Frost. Right now, I'm working on Tanya.

But, you'll be surprised.
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09/08/2010 01:26 PM EDT
My only criticism is that the dialogue and general wordage seems a little too casual or informal in places. It's something that can be somewhat overlooked though because this story is still interesting. While Frost never held a deep interest for me, I think she's been underused and its always refreshing to see any fan contributions highlighting an underused character like Frost. Good job.
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RE: Fan Submission: MK Mini Stories: A Lost Soul
09/08/2010 03:07 PM EDT
Thanks, I'm a bit rusty when it comes to dialogue. They either talk too much, or this happens. I write stories a lot, and it has a great amount of talking in it... I'm trying to tone down as much dialogue as I can.

Thanks though.
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RE: Fan Submission: MK Mini Stories: A Lost Soul
09/08/2010 06:42 PM EDT
I like it so far, though I'm noticing that there are some problems with switching between informal English and formal. Decide on how you want her to speak and stick with it, but otherwise, I'm looking forward to the next one. An interesting take on Frost that deviates from the canon of her going nuts is welcome in my mind.
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RE: Fan Submission: MK Mini Stories: A Lost Soul
09/08/2010 10:33 PM EDT
I like how frost doesnt go nuts I thought she had a lot potential as character maybe in the newer games. Anyway good read can't wait for the next.
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RE: Fan Submission: MK Mini Stories: A Lost Soul
09/11/2010 09:18 PM EDT
I like your descriptive wording, and the way you present the characters. I've always enjoyed Frost being more of a "good-guy." I enjoy writing stories as well, and currently im writing a script based on the first tournament. This is a really good story, and I'm interested to see where this goes.
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09/13/2010 01:07 AM EDT
Thanks for the feedback guys.

Where I'm heading towards this is simple. I'm not trying to make her seem like an evil character at all, but I also don't feel like making her seem like she needs to be good either.

I want to take her in a direction where you'd least suspect she'd go.
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09/13/2010 09:48 AM EDT
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I want to take her in a direction where you'd least suspect she'd go.

Frost is actually Sub-Zero from the future, after he develops a taste for lace and goes through a sex change that accidentally wipes out his memory and sends him back in time? I wouldn't expect that happening. wink
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09/14/2010 12:16 PM EDT
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Icebaby Wrote:
I want to take her in a direction where you'd least suspect she'd go.

Frost is actually Sub-Zero from the future, after he develops a taste for lace and goes through a sex change that accidentally wipes out his memory and sends him back in time? I wouldn't expect that happening. wink


Haha, no... More down the lines as if she's struggling to be good or bad due to her memory loss.

Sub-Zero doesn't personally enjoys her as of right now because of what she did to most of his students, and Quan Chi feels that he needs to have her on his side because he can sense the evil in her, but she doesn't want to go down a path of evil.

Where can you go at this point when you have someone who you believe can help you but doesn't enjoy having you around, while some crazed sorcerer desperately wants to have you on his side? Nowhere right?
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