i'm sorry. i didn't understand anything. is this part 1 of something you'll explain later or i didn't see your first comics?

yeah...i don't understand either...could you please explain?

What?



I mean...

















What?

.........

What was that all about???

Care to explain what's going on?

....These new sprite comics disappoint me.

Really Noob came to find out what was possesing him. Note Form UMK3:Noob Saibot emerges from the darkest region of reality - a region known as the Netherealm. He belongs to a group called the Brothers of the Shadow, and worships an evil and mysterious fallen Elder God. His mission is to spy on the events taking place in the battle between the realms and report back to his enigmatic leaders.
He Fights The Elder God and Is Not Possesed When He Kills Him. Sorry

Here're the problems with your comic...
1. You introduce us to these two characters, and we have no idea who they are. I had no idea that was Noob Saibot because Noob doesn't have white skin for the most part, and I would not have realized that that purple Raiden was meant to be Shinnok (which is who the UMK3 bio is referring to).
2. The spelling and grammar are terrible and the lines themselves are poor. "Ah the Shock. YOU!!!!" If you suddenly saw someone you wanted to kill, would you say that? Also, "Shinnok's" epic taunt "NO I'LL Won't LET YOU LEAVE" makes absolutely no sense. Did you proofread this? Also, why would he respond with that when Noob's asking him to leave his mind?
3. The last panel is a bit confusing. Don't put speech bubbles and thought bubbles so close to the same source when the characters' heads are so close together ("Shinnok" might be decapitated but I was still wondering why he was saying "BACK AT YOU!").
4. You do realize that Noob Saibot served Shinnok loyally until Shinnok was defeated by Liu Kang, right? This comic doesn't even represent what actually happened in the real story. Even in Noob's MKD ending, he kills Sub-Zero, showing that he no longer cares for his little brother.
5. The fact that you had to explain the comic so much makes it terrible. When presenting a new idea to people, you have to look at it from their perspective. Will they know what is going on? Is there enough information presented in the comic itself to explain the situation? If this was my first time reading it, would I be able to know that that's not Raiden? Would my readers understand why a battle with a fallen Elder God who comes from the Netherealm is taking place at The Pit? If they can't tell what you're trying to demonstrate with the comic, then it isn't interesting and requires too much work and effort to even make it worth viewing.
Try again, but this time, take this criticism and use it to make a better comic.

Hey It's Just my story for MK17 (a fan project)
and this is My First Comic.
Edit:Who Said it was Shinnok?

Noob saibots UMK3 Ending:

At first a passive observer, Noob Saibot would soon receive orders to side with the evil Emperor Shao Kahn. Saibot's leaders in the Netherrealm want him to join kahn's battle to gain his trust and to gain entrance into the Earth Realm.

When Kahn drops his guard, Noob Saibot is ordered to attack. With both the Earth Realm and the Outworld's Emperor defeated, the fallen Elder God known as Shinnok can take both realms and gain the power he needs to strike back at the Elder God who banished him into the Netherrealm.

My Comic is just a story.
who Said it had to be that?

Yeah a story that makes no sense whatsoever!

uh...you did, remember?


Noob's Bio/Ending will happen regardless of who wins(except for the killing Shao Kahn part), and the Elder God is always going to be Shinnok.

well then, WHO IS THAT GUY?

It must be the Shock. HIM!!!!

But remember,he WON'T LET you go

ok...now,who is it/him/whatever?

Just wanna know.

I assume you mean "he'll won't let you go"

Well for what it's worth, "NO I'LL Won't LET YOU LEAVE'' is a pretty fucking funny line.


Word of advice: After you're done with your comic, try reading it as someone who doesn't share your brain. Do you understand what's going on? Does it work? That way, sharing your comic with us will make a lot more sense.

By the way the dark blue blood coming out of Shinnok's neck imposes some interesting questions.

Do Gods bleed? If they do, is their blood blue?

This wasn't good, but I honestly want to see how it continues.