for the grim reaper dude he should be after scorpion to bring him back to the neatherrealm for getting away.

and for the school girl she could be in japan fighting sektor's army

dude from sektor's army should be after her

the female master could be the school girls teacher who was defeated by sektor and is trying to escape the neatherrleam and the ninja dude since he is so clumsy people think he sucks and has gone to outworld to fight the mk7 boss for respect and the afracian warrior could be the one who framed rock/molten guy and is pretending to be on the side of good by helping ninja dude through outworld

That would be a pretty badass storyline, thanks ...

Does anyone else have any ideas?

I updated some of the stories (thanks to severg for the storyline)...

But I still need help with fatalitys and names...

(I also re-named the title of the thread, since I thought the other title was to vague...)

The school girl is actually close to a concept I've done for a female Tekunin. Her story basically goes that she was a national Judo and Karate champion. One day her city was undersiege by the Tekunin who burned everything to the ground. The government called it a terrorist attack which wasn;t far off. In the remains of the city, one of the Tekunin syborgs finds the girl, badly burned and on the brink of death. He brings her back to the base where she is automated into a cyborg. For the next several years, she serves the Tekunin with out most loyalty, this also crosses to the end of the 2nd MK Kreate-A-Karakter tournament. Then she begins to have memory lapses and beings to doubt her superiors. It' was just a quick story I put together.

Cool...

Since you're pretty much known for your great character concepts, do you have any tips/ideas for my characters?

The molten dude fatality could be he raps his chains round opponent's neck and start to hang him then rip his skin off on the burn him

sektor army dude could get a missele and stab it into opponent's chest and uppercut them and they explode in the air

Your character pitches are pretty cool. The cyborg ninja is probably my favorite one since it reminds me of Gray Fox, or Stryder.

Try taking some of those concepts and expanding on them a bit. Remember what realm you're placing your character in. Think of their fighting styles, their look, attitude, and alliance. This will usually translate into an easier process of making a story, giving them a motive.Depending on thier look, fighting style, and what they are in general, will give you some ground to go on for thier fatalities and special move.
If you're unsure of how your character is developing, post a basic stat sheet to get some feed back. Don't be afraid of any critiscism. It can only help. True there are a bunch of bastards on the forums who'll bash you, saying stuff like you've got too much free time, but there's a whole bunch more people who'll help you out.
It's rare to get a greate character on your first try, but if you use logic and take the above steps in developing your character it'll be much, much easier, that's not to say that you won't create an awesome character on your first try. You've already got a good start, just try to develope them even more.

Alright, thanks ...

I'll log off right now and type what I can think of, then I'll post what I got tomorrow ...

Glad I could be of some help.

I was able to come up with some names and special moves...



A mexican warrior (Outworld): Salvador Reyes


Fighting styles:

~ Hand-to-hand: Fut Gar

~ Weapon: A sword that was made by Shao Kahn with the help of Shang Tsung. The sword's power reflects the emotion and power of the wielder.


Appearence: He'd be a muscular fighter with a thick mustache. He'd be shirtless with some tattoos on his body. He'd have a dragon tattoo on his right arm and a mexican-themed tattoo on his back (a picture of a mexican revolutanary riding a horse in front of the mexican flag with the phrase "It is better to die on your feet than to live on your knees" in spanish, under it) He'd be wearing some brown pants with his sword strapped to the left side of his waist and he'd be wearing wooden sandals...


Attitude: He'd be very noble, tough, skilled and serious...


Age: 26


Alliance: Good


Story:

~ His father was a brave warrior who fought against Shao Kahn's army using his excellent gunman skills and clever tricks. He, and a small band of followers, were able to defend his small village in Mexico from Shao Kahn's invasion, but was later confronted by Shao Kahn himself. He was given a choice, serve Shao Kahn, or die. After he decided to join, he worked his way up the ranks, and became one of Shao Kahn's strongest warriors, but all the while, he was plotting to overthrow Kahn. Once he reached a certain rank, he was given an enchanted sword. The sword focused on the energy of the wielder and would be very powerful in the right hands. After fully mastering his skills with the sword and hand-to-hand fighting. He confronted Shao Kahn while they were alone in his throne room. He fought fiercely and with great skill, but Shao Kahn's sheer strength was too much. He knew he wouldn't be able to win, so he created a distraction, by breaking a soul chamber with the swords energy, and escaped. After escaping, he chose to stop fighting and settled down with an outworld woman. They later had a son, named Salvador. The brave warrior trained his son and taught him everything he knew. Once his son was old enough, he gave him the sacred sword. Salvador trained all day and night with the sword and was able to master it by the age of 17. Over the next couple of years he mastered his hand-to-hand fighting skills and was proclaimed to be the strongest fighter in his village. At the age of 25, his father told him of his ordeal with Shao Kahn, and explained of the emperors tyranny. Hearing of the atrocities Shao Kahn had commited ignited a fire within the young warrior and he soon decided to set off on a journey, a journey to to defeat Shao Kahn and bring peace to outworld. So the young warrior left the village and put his skills to the test. He fought many warriors and now believes he's ready to confront Shao Kahn...

Fatalities:

~ Salvador charges up his sword with his "energy" and holds it like a golf club. Then he swings it, causing a wave of energy to tear/burn off the opponents skin...

Special Moves:

~ Salvador would stab the ground with his sword, using his energy to crack the ground. Then red energy would burst out of the cracks...

~ Salvador would charge his sword and swing it, causing a wave of energy to knock the opponent back.

Concept Stuff: I came up with the name "Salvador Reyes" because, in spanish, "Salvador" means "savior" and "reyes" means "king" and I thought it would fit him. I also thought "Fut Gar" would fit him since it involves "chi" energy and seems like a very tough fighting style. And the phrase "It is better to die on your feet than to live on your knees" comes from Emiliano Zapata, a mexican revolutionary...

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Female drunken master (Earthrealm/Japan): Sakiko Nakasawa


Fighting style:

~ Hand-to-hand: Zui Quan, also known as "Drunken Kung Fu"

~ Weapon: None, but she'd have the ability to pull out her wine canister and strike her opponent with it.


Appearence: She'd be a japanese woman with brown hair, wearing a white martial arts robe, similar to the kind a karate master would wear. She'd also have her wine canister strapped to her back. Her outfit would be showing cleavage, to complement her beauty. She'd also be wearing wooden sandals...


Attitude: She'd be very skilled, casual, playful and good natured...


Age: 29


Alliance: Good


Story:

~ A master of drunken fighting, she is known for her beauty and unique style of fighting. Recently, she has been training a young girl, Mitsuko, in martial arts. She and her young apprentice are the only things standing between Sektor's Tekunin and Japan. After hearing about her young student going on a quest to find and defeat Sektor, the leader of the Tekunin, she decides to find her and stop her before she reaches him. She knows her student isn't anywhere near ready to fight an opponent as strong as Sektor...

Fatalities:

~ It would be the same as Bo Rai Cho's "Flamethrower" fatality, except instead of falling apart, the opponent's flesh would burn off, causing the opponent to run around and scream in pain. Then fall to the floor, dead...

~ (I got this idea from another thread) Sakiko would walk up to the side of the opponent and get them in a head-lock. Then, she'd tilt the opponent back and pull out her alcohol canister. Then she would pour the alcohol down the opponents throat and toss the canister away. Then, while the opponent is still in a head-lock and both fighters are facing forward, she'd light a torch on the ground and stab the opponents stomach with it. Then she'd move away from the opponent as they begin to burn. Their skin would start to rip and bursts of fire would pop out of the wounds, until the opponent explodes...

Special Moves:

~ Sakiko could pull out her alcohol jug and spill some wine on the floor, causing the opponent to slip if they're close enough...

~ Sakiko could taunt the opponent by putting one hand on her hip, pulling out her alcohol canister, holding it towards her opponent, smiling, and saying "Let's party!"...

Concept Stuff: I came up with the name "Sakiko" because I heard that it comes from the japanese word "saki", which I think means "alcohol" or "wine" in english...

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A "grim reaper-like" wraith (Netherrealm): Phantom


Fighting style:

~ Hand-to-hand: Ghost Hands

~ Weapon: Scythe


Appearence: He'd be wearing a long black robe, like the grim reaper, with the hood over his head, hiding his face in the shadows. He'd have evil, glowing, red eyes and his arms and feet would be skeletal. He'd always be holding his scythe, and he'd be wearing wooden sandals...


Attitude: He'd be a very serious, sinister fighter...


Age: Eternal


Alliance: Neutral


Story:

~ Once Quan Chi was killed by Raiden's blast, Scorpion's quest for vengance was brought to a halt. The reason Scorpion was allowed to leave the netherrealm was to have his revenge against the person who killed his family and clan. Once Quan Chi was killed, Scorpion's chances for revenge were completely lost. And since he had no reason to be out of the netherrealm anymore, the demons that released him decided to bring him back. Since they knew he would resist, they sent their strongest warrior, a wraith named Phantom, known for his sinister appearence and stealthy ways. He has defeated some of the greatest warriors throughout the realms. He will surely put Scorpion's skills to the test...

Fatalities:

~ It would be like Shinnok's hand of hell fatality, but it'd look much more realistic. Phantom would slowly raise his hand, from the ground up, As he does this, the floor next to the opponent would begin to cave in and lava/fire would begin spurting out. Then, a giant skeletal hand would rise out of the hole and grab the opponent. The opponent would scream in pain, as the flaming hot hand begins burning their skin. Then, slowly, the hand would go back into the hole, while still holding the opponent...

~ It would be like Li Mei's "Pressure Point" fatality, except after poking the certain pressure points, the opponent would start shaking violently and blood would leak out of their eyes, ears, nose and mouth. Then the opponent's heart would explode, leaving a bloody hole in the front of their chest...

Special Moves:

~ Phantom would hit the floor with the bladed end of his scythe, causing the ground to crack and fire to burst from the crack...

~ Phantom would raise his scythe and then hit the ground with the wooden part, causing a mini earthquake, like Bo Rai Cho's "Foot Stomp" move

~ Phantom would sink into the ground and rise up out of the ground on the other side of his opponent, like Raiden.

Concept Stuff: I came up with the pressure point fatality because Phantom's hand-to-hand fighting style, Ghost Hands, is a form of Dim Mak, a fighting style that focuses on pressure points.

A humorus ninja (Earthrealm/Japan): Hiroshi Kaminaga


Fighting style:

~ Hand-to-hand: Nau Hau-zi Chuan, also known as "Angry Monkey Fist".

~ Weapon: Ninja Sword


Appearence: He'd be wearing a traditional ninja suit made of brown cloth. His entire face, except his eyes, would be covered in a mask, and he'd have his ninja sword strapped to his back. He'd also have a belt around his waist with various items strapped to it (like potions, shurikens, ect.)...


Attitude: He'd be very humorus, clumsy and good natured...


Age: 24


Alliance: Good


Story:

~ Hiroshi is known for his clumsyness and irresponsibility. He was thrown out his village for letting Sektor's Tekunin army invade it. His family was disgraced because of his foolish behavior. After being defeated by one of Sektor's greatest warriors, he went into hiding. But no matter how hard he tried, he was always found and defeated. One day, while hiding in the forest, he met one of Sektor's greatest warriors. The same one that defeated him and invaded his village. After suffering a paingul defeat, he was thrown down a hill and tumbled down until he hit a rock. The force of the impact caused his locket to fly out of his ninja suit and into a river. He franticly jumped into the river to retrieve it. After finding it, he crawled back onto land and dropped to his knees. Then he opened his locket and saw a picture of his familiy. A deep feeling of guilt and sorrow went through him. It was then that he decided to redeem himself in the eyes of his family and village. He left to forest and went to train as hard as he could, so that one day, he could find Sektor and defeat him...


Fatalities:

~ Hiroshi would throw a potion at the opponents feet, causing a magical cloud of smoke to cover the opponent. Then, when the smoke clears, only a bloody skeleton would be left standing. Then the opponents skeleton would fall...

~ Hiroshi would draw his sword and begin swinging it around, as if her were practicing. Then the sword would slip out of his hand and stab the opponent in the chest. Then Hiroshi would laugh nervously and run away...

Special Moves:

~ Hiroshi would pull some shurikens out of his belt and throw them at his opponent...

~ Hiroshi would be able to replenish 10% of his health by pulling down his mask and drinking a potion from his belt. But the move would be risky since there would be a 25% chance of him getting the wrong potion. If he drinks the wrong potion, he'd spit it out, stumble around, and lose 10% of his health...

~ Hiroshi would taunt the opponent by crouching down and dancing like a monkey...

Other Stuff: I gave him "Angry Monkey Fist" because I thought it sounded like a funny fighting style, and I want him to be a humorus fighter...

An asian school girl (Earthrealm/Japan): Mitsuko Hoshino


Fighting style:

~ Hand-to-hand: Ya Quan

~ Weapon: Ball and Chain


Appearence: She'd be a young japanese school girl with short, black hair and a school girl uniform and her ball and chain would be strapped around her waist...

Attitude: She'd be a tough, childish young fighter...


Age: 16


Alliance: Good


Story:

~ She is a young female warrior in Japan, known for her superior fighting skills. For months, she had been repelling Sektor's troops from Japan with the help of her Martial Arts teacher, who was known for her drunken fighting skills. They fought many battles in an effort to drive the Sektor's Tekunin out of Japan, but to no avail. The Tekunin troops just kept coming in waves. She then made the decision to find the leader of the Tekunin, Sektor, and defeat him herself...


Fatalities:

~ First, Mitsuko trips the opponent by swinging her ball and chain low to the ground. Then, while the opponent is trying to get up, she'd swing the ball and chain overhead and smash the opponents head in...

Special Moves:

~ Mitsuko would spin her ball and chain around horizontaly. It'd be a long range attack...

~ Mitsuko would slam her ball and chain to the ground, causin a mini-earthquake. If the opponent is on the ground while this happens, they would lose their balance and stumble around...

Other Stuff: I thought Ya Quan would be a good fighting style for her because it's supposed to be a very fluid fighting style, and I wanted her to be a very graceful fighter...

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A high-tech ninja from Sektor's tekunin (Earthrealm/Japan): Gensu


Fighting style:

~ Hand-to-hand: Togakure Ryu

~ Weapon: Plasma Ninja Sword


Appearence: He'd look very smooth and sleek, and he'd look much more human than the other cyborgs. He'd look a lot like JAX007's Sektor...


Attitude: He'd be a very cold hearted, arrogant, evil, skilled and sinister warrior...


Age: 29


Alliance: Evil


Story:

~As one of Sektor's greatest warriors, Gensu was in charge of finding villages to steal supplies from. He was also the one leading the attacks in Japan. He was once human, an evil, deceptive human ninja, until he met up with Sektor. He decided to join the Tekunin and help Sektor take over the world. In return, he would recieve a large portion of land to do with whatever he wishes. He is a very deadly warrior known for his elite fighting skills, high-tech weaponry and cruel behavior. He fights with speed and ferocity and has a reputation for decieving other, more powerful warriors, like the god of earth...


Fatalities:

~ Gensu leans forward, with both arms pointed forward, in fists, and shoots lots of explosive shurikens at the opponent. Then, he rushes to the opponent and upprecuts them high in the air. Then, while the opponent is still in the air, they explode, and pieces of their body start falling from the sky...

Special Moves:

~ Gensu would be able to toss explosive shurikens at his opponents. He'd stand straight and point one arm towards his opponent, in a fist. Then explosive shurikens would shoot out of his arm...

~ Gensu crosses his arm's over his chest and turns invisible...

~ Gensu puts his right arm over his left shoulder. Then he slashes the opponent with his arm multiple times with lightning speed...

Other Stuff: I gave him "Togakure Ryu" because it sounded like a very cool ninja fighting style. It involes spiked wrist/foot bands that allow the opponent to block sword slashes, inflict heavy damage and climb on trees and stuff. And I got the name "Gensu" from the japanese word "gensui", which means "general of an army" in english...

I love your asian school girl concept, very Gogo Yubari

Actually, I got the idea from Kill Bill. I thought Gogo was a really cool character and I wanted someone like her in the MK world...

It's good to get feedback on my characters from other MK Online members, thanks...