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09/08/2011 12:54 AM (UTC)by
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Jerrod
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09/08/2011 12:54 AM (UTC)
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You basically summarized what MK is and what's happened in 250 words. What's so special about it coming from Raiden's perspective when there's so little information to go on? Where's the struggle? Where's the climax? Where are the details that make this Raiden's story excatly? You have a beginning, a middle, and an end, but it doesn't go together, it doesn't flow. There's no story here.
Not every story written has to be a novel, but even the character blurbs in the games has more information than this.
Also, please proofread your work, there are a few spelling errors, and Shao Kahn's name is not hyphenated.
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