sektorseven security report no. 234786
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sektorseven security report no. 234786
06/21/2010 07:59 PM EST
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RE: Fan Submission: sektorseven security report no. 234786
06/22/2010 04:54 AM EST
I gave you a 4/5 Dragon points

I do like it a lot. It might take a few reading overs to Fully understand what you getting too

I think what you are saying is, that these humans were captured by a clan under the name of... "Wartoro." Correct? This all took place during the "ShinSin," war right? They were then in this lab where they had this stuff injected in them that was made from Baraka's DNA? It made them bigger, faster, and stronger? Then in the long run they got too powerful and over-took the... whole world, or just the lab (I'm not really clear right there.)

So if anyone could capture them they would get...WHAT?!...hang on let me C&P and see how much this is. "1000000000" that Is alot of Koin bro:P

**1,000,000,000**

So I added in the comma's and that is 1 billion koins. I really wonder how much that is worth in the MK Universe haha.

All n' all I do like the concept of the story. They're a few reasons I didn't give 5/5 DP's. I think the story wasn't quite long enough, Next time maybe elaborate on things in your story a bit more. And next time also take your time a bit more too... Go into the Notebook on your computer and type it up there first so you can read over and observe where you made your mistake, I mean... MKO will still be here after you make your story. I also hope that you can take constructive criticism because some people here may be less kind than I was. I tried to find the BEST in your work and I think I succeeded. Keep posting and I will keep Giving you my opinions

Nice work SektorSeven
I look forward to seeing more of your workgrin

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RE: Fan Submission: sektorseven security report no. 234786
06/23/2010 10:37 AM EST
thx of the feedback. it was ment to be short because it is in the form of an official document. if you have seen declassified government documents released under the freedom of information act you will see how i wrote it.
"If it is alive it can feel pain. If it has eyes it can see it own suffering. If it has blood you can make it bleed. If it has a mouth you can make it scream." Darth i forgot his name. "Thats the best thing about you humans. You bleed." a tarkatan warrior.
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RE: Fan Submission: sektorseven security report no. 234786
06/23/2010 11:27 AM EST
now to avoid plagerism time to give credit where credit is due.

the idea for the watoro clan and the shinsin wars was borrowed from the webcomic called No Need For Bushido© or NNFB for short. this comic was written by joe and his brother whos name i cant look up at this time because their website crashed. will post their full names when the site is fixed and i can look them up which probably wont be long as their site is real popular.

space pirates and phazon are the ideas from the Metroid Prime® series of the Metroid® franchise owned by Nintendo®.

i am doing this to show that i do not plagerize and that i am a honest person who will allways credit other peoples hard work.

also although i dont think this one is nessesary just in case Mortal Kombat® and all related charicters and ideas are owned by Midway Entertainment now owned by WB interactive a subsideary of WB productions.
"If it is alive it can feel pain. If it has eyes it can see it own suffering. If it has blood you can make it bleed. If it has a mouth you can make it scream." Darth i forgot his name. "Thats the best thing about you humans. You bleed." a tarkatan warrior.
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RE: Fan Submission: sektorseven security report no. 234786
06/23/2010 12:12 PM EST
From now on Sektorseven, instead of double posting, just edit the previous post.

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RE: Fan Submission: sektorseven security report no. 234786
06/25/2010 08:59 AM EST
got it
"If it is alive it can feel pain. If it has eyes it can see it own suffering. If it has blood you can make it bleed. If it has a mouth you can make it scream." Darth i forgot his name. "Thats the best thing about you humans. You bleed." a tarkatan warrior.
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