Through the Eye of the Tourtured
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Through the Eye of the Tourtured
03/17/2011 06:08 PM EST
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RE: Fan Submission: Through the Eye of the Tourtured
03/18/2011 03:33 AM EST
Wow, pretty great so far, can't wait to read the next chapter.

You work with what you got...not what you hope for.

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RE: Fan Submission: Through the Eye of the Tourtured
03/18/2011 03:59 AM EST
I wasn't so much into how you transformed Frost into a wraith and had Sareena working on Noob's side in your previous stuff, but Kintaro and Sheeva transformed into demons, on the other hand, seems very interesting.

I also like the touch that as just a dead soul, Kano wouldn't have his tech, so his eyeplate is replaced with rotted flesh.
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RE: Fan Submission: Through the Eye of the Tourtured
03/19/2011 03:29 PM EST
Detox Wrote:
Wow, pretty great so far, can't wait to read the next chapter.

Thanks! The next chapter will be up by the end of the month. smile
RazorsEdge701 Wrote:
I wasn't so much into how you transformed Frost into a wraith and had Sareena working on Noob's side in your previous stuff, but Kintaro and Sheeva transformed into demons, on the other hand, seems very interesting.
I also like the touch that as just a dead soul, Kano wouldn't have his tech, so his eyeplate is replaced with rotted flesh.

I didn't know you read my other stuff, it's greatly appreciated! Though to be honest,
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something tells me you will absolutely hate the last half of this story if I keep it as it currently is,
as even I wonder if it's something that can be applied to Kano or not, another reason for my breaking it down into parts.
In any case, thank you guys for reading and commenting.
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RE: Fan Submission: Through the Eye of the Tourtured
03/19/2011 09:14 PM EST
Awesome!
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RE: Fan Submission: Through the Eye of the Tourtured
04/17/2011 10:44 AM EST
Yet another great read but if I remember


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I thought you were making one of sareena?
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RE: Fan Submission: Through the Eye of the Tourtured
05/01/2011 02:05 AM EST
\/\/007! I hate bumping my own work, but I have to thank MKO for twittering my work! grin
maximus12 Wrote:
Yet another great read but if I remember
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I thought you were making one of sareena?

I put it on the back-burner for the moment, as when I started this one, I was in the right mindset, and so it just sort of flowed out. I had the right inspiration, so I kept going with it. Sareena will get a bio eventually, but I'm willing to bet I'll have another short story done before that, as I'm further along in the next story than with Sareena.
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