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Hey guys,
This thread is sort of an invitation that I’m extending to all fans of fighting/action games around the net. Please read carefully, and if this sounds like something you might like, let me know.
A long while ago, I started a written "project" here on MKO; a script-based, episodic action series that stemmed from from a messy thread I barely remember now. Anyway, I canceled this project after about 20 episodes because I was running out of free time, and I didn't think there were enough people involved. Well, I've recently decided to take this project up again and
"remake" it all the way from Episode 1. Why? Because I feel that my writing style has gone through some significant improvement, and the series would be a lot better off, and a lot more entertaining, if I started again (so don't even bother looking at the old thread or I'll come to your house). And in the middle of all the "serious business" I'm going through right now, it's good to have a little "out-there" hobby to partake on
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Anyway, this “project” is a series, like the many out there on TV right now. Of course, I won’t have the tools and resources necessary to make a full-fledged TV series until I get a degree; what I CAN do as of right now is write.
“Deadly Dominion” is a script-based, online, episodic series (this just means that it’s written in script format, to give the reader the feeling of watching an actual show on a screen). It is primarily an action genre, chock-full of fight scenes and action sequences. Still, it blends many other genres into one: fantasy, sci-fi, thriller, and even comedy. It boasts a large cast of almost 20 characters, from heroes, to villains, to anti-heroes, to anything in-between. Each character is unique, so everyone is sure to have a favorite as soon as he or she is introduced. In short, this is a written series broken up into weekly (or so) episodes that is sure to appeal to anyone out there who enjoys action films/shows, fantasy film/shows, or fighting games (since many of my ideas came from tidbits of other similar pieces).
I have the pilot episode written already and will release it when and if enough people show interest in seeing it and the ones that will come from it.
What I’m going to be doing in this thread (hopefully it stays) is sharing a bit of the story with you guys before I actually put up the pilot episode. I’ll be doing that by posting biographies of the characters. I’m sure that anyone who sticks with me here is going to eventually find a character they like above all others, will like the feel of the story and, hopefully, start anticipating the actual episodes.
I’ll start with the “protagonist” (the quotations are due to the fact that there’s not definite protagonist in the literal sense of the word). Through this guy’s bio, however, you can understand the premise of the story and be ready for the future bios. Like you all right now, he's also clueless in the beginning.
"Life couldn’t be better as you traveled the world with your father, sharing in his unusual, yet admirable love for the art of self-defense, cheering for him as he competed in worldwide martial arts tournaments and using his cheers as your fuel to be just as skilled as he. He was everything you needed to be happy, and his lifestyle is what fulfilled you as you embarked on a new adventure to a foreign land time after time. Whenever the constant trips wore you out, he would readily return to China; although you were both born in the Americas, the one place you could call home was located on the far east, near your long-time trainer and “second father”, Master Akio. Truly, your life could not get any better.
Alas, there came the day when your father left, mute to information on his destination... you felt something horrible in the pit of your stomach. You knew something was wrong, yet could do nothing as he stepped into the boat off the China coast and waved, growing smaller into a fade. How you wish that hadn’t been the last time you saw your father... how you wish you never received the news that he had mysteriously died, so that you could at least hang onto false hope day after day... how you wish you weren’t so angry over his death that you vowed to do whatever it took to find out what fate truly had befallen the only family you had left on Earth.
And that anger was a portal. And that portal led you to a distant land, an unknown world. Soon, you were no longer home, but in the foreign terrain of a power-hungry governor, devilish beings, a dangerous competition for the ultimate prize, and few allies and many enemies at every turn. Yet somehow you knew that through all this mess, through all this hazard, therein lied the truth... and you were going to unearth that truth no matter how many times your life was threatened."
~ CLARK “MACE” RYDER ~
"That is the story of Clark Ryder, known in the world of martial arts competitions as “Mace” as a tribute to his unbreakable skill and devastating blows. For him, happiness really was a short phase of life, to be replaced by fury over his father’s cloaked death and obsession with the truth that was never told. With the help of his father’s long-time friend, Master Akio, Mace learns of the most common link between all races of the universe: the art of self-defense. With this knowledge, he is propelled into the distant world known as Aurania, where a renowned tournament is set to begin as intergalactic civilizations compete for the ultimate existing item, crafted by the angels themselves. And as the once sacred tournament is set to turn into a bloodthirsty game manipulated by a corrupt soul, Mace finds himself closer than ever to the hidden truth surrounding his father’s secret life and death..."
Current Age: 28
Experience: Trained by renowned martial arts master, household name in various tournaments.
Most Notable Facial Features: Stubble and unkempt black hair
Usual Combat Attire: Open blue jacket, red belt, knife straps and cloth, white full-length breeches, navy boots.
Most-used Weapon: Long Chinese Sword
His is the simplest, most to-the-point, non-complex bio, which makes him a good candidate for the first introduced. With the basis of the story, you might see how MK influenced the idea. Don't worry, though, the more you know about the rest of the story and the cast, the more apparent its uniqueness will become. I’ll post the next one in a while and, of course, I welcome all responses.
This thread is sort of an invitation that I’m extending to all fans of fighting/action games around the net. Please read carefully, and if this sounds like something you might like, let me know.
A long while ago, I started a written "project" here on MKO; a script-based, episodic action series that stemmed from from a messy thread I barely remember now. Anyway, I canceled this project after about 20 episodes because I was running out of free time, and I didn't think there were enough people involved. Well, I've recently decided to take this project up again and
"remake" it all the way from Episode 1. Why? Because I feel that my writing style has gone through some significant improvement, and the series would be a lot better off, and a lot more entertaining, if I started again (so don't even bother looking at the old thread or I'll come to your house). And in the middle of all the "serious business" I'm going through right now, it's good to have a little "out-there" hobby to partake on
Anyway, this “project” is a series, like the many out there on TV right now. Of course, I won’t have the tools and resources necessary to make a full-fledged TV series until I get a degree; what I CAN do as of right now is write.
“Deadly Dominion” is a script-based, online, episodic series (this just means that it’s written in script format, to give the reader the feeling of watching an actual show on a screen). It is primarily an action genre, chock-full of fight scenes and action sequences. Still, it blends many other genres into one: fantasy, sci-fi, thriller, and even comedy. It boasts a large cast of almost 20 characters, from heroes, to villains, to anti-heroes, to anything in-between. Each character is unique, so everyone is sure to have a favorite as soon as he or she is introduced. In short, this is a written series broken up into weekly (or so) episodes that is sure to appeal to anyone out there who enjoys action films/shows, fantasy film/shows, or fighting games (since many of my ideas came from tidbits of other similar pieces).
I have the pilot episode written already and will release it when and if enough people show interest in seeing it and the ones that will come from it.
What I’m going to be doing in this thread (hopefully it stays) is sharing a bit of the story with you guys before I actually put up the pilot episode. I’ll be doing that by posting biographies of the characters. I’m sure that anyone who sticks with me here is going to eventually find a character they like above all others, will like the feel of the story and, hopefully, start anticipating the actual episodes.
I’ll start with the “protagonist” (the quotations are due to the fact that there’s not definite protagonist in the literal sense of the word). Through this guy’s bio, however, you can understand the premise of the story and be ready for the future bios. Like you all right now, he's also clueless in the beginning.
"Life couldn’t be better as you traveled the world with your father, sharing in his unusual, yet admirable love for the art of self-defense, cheering for him as he competed in worldwide martial arts tournaments and using his cheers as your fuel to be just as skilled as he. He was everything you needed to be happy, and his lifestyle is what fulfilled you as you embarked on a new adventure to a foreign land time after time. Whenever the constant trips wore you out, he would readily return to China; although you were both born in the Americas, the one place you could call home was located on the far east, near your long-time trainer and “second father”, Master Akio. Truly, your life could not get any better.
Alas, there came the day when your father left, mute to information on his destination... you felt something horrible in the pit of your stomach. You knew something was wrong, yet could do nothing as he stepped into the boat off the China coast and waved, growing smaller into a fade. How you wish that hadn’t been the last time you saw your father... how you wish you never received the news that he had mysteriously died, so that you could at least hang onto false hope day after day... how you wish you weren’t so angry over his death that you vowed to do whatever it took to find out what fate truly had befallen the only family you had left on Earth.
And that anger was a portal. And that portal led you to a distant land, an unknown world. Soon, you were no longer home, but in the foreign terrain of a power-hungry governor, devilish beings, a dangerous competition for the ultimate prize, and few allies and many enemies at every turn. Yet somehow you knew that through all this mess, through all this hazard, therein lied the truth... and you were going to unearth that truth no matter how many times your life was threatened."
~ CLARK “MACE” RYDER ~
"That is the story of Clark Ryder, known in the world of martial arts competitions as “Mace” as a tribute to his unbreakable skill and devastating blows. For him, happiness really was a short phase of life, to be replaced by fury over his father’s cloaked death and obsession with the truth that was never told. With the help of his father’s long-time friend, Master Akio, Mace learns of the most common link between all races of the universe: the art of self-defense. With this knowledge, he is propelled into the distant world known as Aurania, where a renowned tournament is set to begin as intergalactic civilizations compete for the ultimate existing item, crafted by the angels themselves. And as the once sacred tournament is set to turn into a bloodthirsty game manipulated by a corrupt soul, Mace finds himself closer than ever to the hidden truth surrounding his father’s secret life and death..."
Current Age: 28
Experience: Trained by renowned martial arts master, household name in various tournaments.
Most Notable Facial Features: Stubble and unkempt black hair
Usual Combat Attire: Open blue jacket, red belt, knife straps and cloth, white full-length breeches, navy boots.
Most-used Weapon: Long Chinese Sword
His is the simplest, most to-the-point, non-complex bio, which makes him a good candidate for the first introduced. With the basis of the story, you might see how MK influenced the idea. Don't worry, though, the more you know about the rest of the story and the cast, the more apparent its uniqueness will become. I’ll post the next one in a while and, of course, I welcome all responses.
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So here's the thing... I'm going to be putting up the first part of the pilot episode (yeah, I couldn't introduce everyone in few pages) in very little time, so I dont think I'll be able to get through all the bios. For that reason, I'll go ahead and put up two that are very important. The lead villains, you could say, of the series.
These are the longest bios of all, but don't be intimidated! Just start reading and you should be hooked within the first few sentences! Thanks to the people who are enjoying these.
The feelings of hate and bitterness can be seen as seeds, planted deep within a young soul, where it takes root and feeds on its own thirst for wicked reparation of itself. These seeds were placed within an ambitious Heiligian youngster by the name of Falcar, who was born into the royal family of the King and Queen of Heilig. From a young age, he had dreams of himself towering above the entire planet as the new king... he would close his eyes and see himself taking unto his hands the jewel-encrusted crown of his father and setting it onto his head, where it fit flawlessly as if molded just for him. Then came the day where these dreams turned into impossible fantasy: the day when his father named his older brother, Malickus, the heir of the throne, praising Malickus as the owner of the purer soul and condemning his own son Falcar as an overly-ambitious one who lost his path in life. Falcar became physically sick with hate for his father, hate for Malickus, for his entire wretched family who did not see talent where there was plenty of it. And so he did not think twice before thieving one of his father’s Gates (an orb able to open portals to other dimensions) one morning and leaving the bastion, the family, and the world of Heilig... landing himself in the much-darker neighboring dominion known as Aurania.
At least his father was able to indirectly serve him on one thing: Falcar had become an incredible and fearless combatant over time, thanks to harsh years of mandatory training. He quickly found a way to bring his abilities to the Auranian King’s palace, where he offered his skills in exchange for a place in the royal fortress. Impressed, King Uriel welcomed Falcar into his ranks, naming him General of his army. Luck was on Falcar’s side, for many chances to prove himself soon followed. Uprisings erupted repeatedly as outraged civilians attempted to annihilate the tyranny of King Uriel, only to be crushed time after time under the powerful defense of General Falcar Lotus. The king recognized a loyal hero when he saw one, and with time, adopted Falcar as his own son and future ruler of Aurania. The seeds of hate and of bitterness were giving way to much stronger emotions, however: among them desire, greed, and a dangerous impatience. Falcar was well aware that, like his own race, Auranians had almost-everlasting life, and that a drastic event must come to save him of insufferable waiting. His mind went to work, only to be interrupted by yet another mutiny. Falcar once again led the royal army into battle against the rebels, but decided to do things a little differently this time; he demanded that the leader of the rebellion be captured and brought to him alive. Believing Falcar to have a sadistic torture in mind, his warriors obeyed. Falcar found himself face-to-face with a furious Auranian rebel, but rather than take his life, he proposed a deal: feigning a horrible life under the iron fist of King Uriel, he asked that the rebel follow him to the Throne Room, where they could find Uriel and, together, slay the king. And so they did. King Uriel, though powerful, was unable to withstand the combined attack of Falcar and the dexterous rebel fighter, and with a final cry of rage and lament over the fictional knife wedged in his back, Uriel drew a last quivering breath and died. The joyous rebel congratulated Falcar and welcomed his new reign as a benevolent king to Aurania. Falcar’s response was a violent slash to the rebel’s throat, separating neck and head for a quick death. Immediately after, the battle was over, and Uriel's army rushed into the Throne Room in shock. Falcar explained the events that had preceded: the rebel leader had managed to incapacitate Falcar and escape into the room, where he took Uriel's life and rejoiced in his feat until Falcar caught him once again and avenged his loving, adoptive father. The royal army hailed Falcar as a tragic hero.
All hail the new Ruler of Aurania, Emperor Falcar...
He descended Falcar’s demonic-looking crown over his head and sat on the bloodied throne. And so his childhood dream came to pass and, despite the much more sinister tone of his success, Falcar was satisfied... for now.
Aware of the upcoming Adonis Tournament, his first order of business as emperor was to gather the most able fighters of the entire world to serve him closely. Excellent work, for Aurania crushed the competition, including Heilig, and Falcar had the Adonis Stone in his power for the first time. He could think of no better way to use its powers other than to severely weaken the populace of Aurania as a whole, crippling their lifestyle so they could just barely live their lives and never again be able to structure an uprising against their new king. Alas, such misuse of the Adonis Stone took many, many years to complete and drained all of its holy power. Impatience not being his virtue, Falcar wrathfully awaited the next Adonis Tournament. He was deathly eager to hold the Stone in his hands once again, to feel its power bending to his will; then would be the time when Falcar would, at long last, be able to exact his revenge upon his father and brother. With the help of the Stone, he would instill unimaginable power within his army, rendering them indestructible, and commanding them and his generals in a direct attack on Heilig. Upon his victory, he would take what was rightfully his all along: the Heiligian crown. The time for the next tournament came ... but Aurania slowly began losing its chances of triumph. Falcar’s generals were losing their respective bouts, failing to defeat the Heiligian natives and the foreign visitors. Soon, only one of his generals remained: Lara Dalton, his beautiful spy and Falcar’s assured future empress. Falcar still had hopes; Lara had broken every bone of her foes in the last tournament and sealed Aurania’s victory, an impressive accomplishment that overjoyed Falcar and gave way to their current, close relationship. She was arguably the most deadly of his generals... she MUST win the Stone! Lara secured victories, and eventually made it to the final round of the Adonis Tournament, where she was pitted against an Earthling by the name of Marcus Ryder. Cocky and intimidating as ever, she walked into the arena of their battle, but her arrogant smile was soon wiped from her striking face when she found herself unable to overcome an inhuman ability Marcus possessed to concentrate his bodily energy into destructive psychic manipulations. Lara had been defeated, and Earth had taken the Stone for itself, along with Falcar’s sick lust for revenge.
Through turbulent times, Falcar awaited the third tournament, his obsession with Heilig growing stronger and stronger, deadlier and deadlier. When the time came, he was infuriated to learn that Marcus Ryder, the last champion, would be returning to represent Earth yet again in the host world of Heilig. The fights were underway... and Aurania’s chances, once again, looked grim. When nothing but a couple of his generals were left to fight, with the Earth-born champion still standing, Falcar was succumbing to a horrible feeling of alarming desperation. The tournament continued as it should... until the Watchers (holy spirits tasked with overseeing over the tournament) discovered that the champion Marcus Ryder had died, leaving no traces as to why. Calamity struck and rumors ran wild, as no competitor of the sacred Adonis Tournament had ever sullied the event with blood. Everything took a sharp turn to the worse when, amid the disorder, the King of Heilig was also killed. Disgusted with the happenings, the Watchers ended the tournament there and then.
Fast-forward to current times, when the revision of the last tournament is set to begin. Warriors will once more gather in the host world of Aurania to compete for the Adonis Stone. And as preparations commence... Falcar watches from within his palace with a frenzied glare and a warped mind.
Current Age: 182 (Looks about 35)
Experience: Taught by best Heiligian Battalion generals as a child, spent years as General of Falcar’s Army
Most Notable Facial Features: Demonic Kabuto with elongated silver-encrusted horns and diamond animalistic fangs in mouth area (symbol of sole authority) / bright gold eyes
Usual Combat Attire: Royal Kabuto, skeletal pauldrons, royal black cape, spiked torso straps, gauntlets, and belt with Auranian Symbol, pointed silver greaves.
Most-used Weapon: Gauntlets grow outer section with spinning, chainsaw-like blades / giant silver scythe
~ LARA DALTON ~
An ironic contrast creates the essence that is Lara, her outer splendor acting as a deceitful casing for one of the darkest, most depraved souls in existence. So it is now and so it has always been, since her childhood years as the single daughter of a middle-class Auranian family. To her father, a brave warrior plotting a strong uprising against Uriel's rule, Lara would put on a mask of decency, playing the pure and hopeful daughter whose dream was to see the rebellion succeed. In secrecy, however, she would hear roaming words of King Uriel’s palace and lust for the riches within. The deception she forced unto her family drove her proud father to train her in self-defense and turn her into a prodigy of the art at the young age of 19, eventually deeming his girl capable and worthy of a vital position among the warrior rebels preparing the attack against the king. Lara was disgusted that her trickery caused such an unpleasant event that went completely against her actual wishes. The time had come to reveal who she really was...
One day, as the battle against Uriel's forces drew near, Lara told her father of how necessary it was that the royal palace be analyzed beforehand for weaknesses and strategic spots that would aid them in the attack. She volunteered for the mission with no hesitation. Her father appointed their second-best fighter (a young man by the name of Desmond) to accompany Lara, and so, the duo set off on a long trip toward the one place the world feared as one. While they journeyed and months passed, word quickly spread of the last rebellious attack on the palace, which had resulted in the last king’s death and the naming of a new king; namely, the late emperor’s adopted son and former general of the Auranian army. Falcar’s appointed governors from all four corners of the world were planning to gather at the palace very soon to meet with the new supreme ruler and heed his law. “Let’s turn back”, Lara’s accompanier said. “It’s too dangerous to show up at the palace at a time like this!” There was no way she was giving up on her clandestine goals now. “No! This new emperor is surely just as corrupt as Uriel! We stick to the plan until the end!” And so she decidedly marched onward, eventually arriving at the astonishing capital where the palace stood. A feeling that had never crossed her heart before now washed over her very being: the feeling of belonging. Falcar’s capital and the extravagant luxury that composed it was where she should have been born, where she should have lived all these 19 years, as opposed to a beaten-down city with a pitiable family that lived on delusions and would die by them as well. Desmond noticed something evil in Lara’s eyes whenever she admired a rich field, a lofty building, or one of the innumerable solid-gold and silver structures.
They reached palace grounds and, as Lara expected, were almost immediately attacked. Falcar’s ever-loyal sentinels withdrew their lances and prepared to rip the intruders apart, and would have done a marvelous job if Lara and Desmond were not the gifted fighters the latest rebellion was counting on. One by one the royal defenders fell, the duo ripping through them with the agility and proficiency of bullets through flesh. Their persistent skills led them to the tyrant himself, and soon, the two biggest hopes for Falcar’s fall stood face-to-face with Aurania’s new antagonist. Falcar scrutinized the impressive combatants before him; what he saw was burning hate in Desmond’s eyes... and a hypnotic invitation in Lara’s. “Lock up the boy” were the first and simple words he uttered. Desmond fought the new wave of guards, but without Lara by his side, he slowly fell to his knees, defeated. “Why?” Desmond asked with a quivering breath and a wrecked heart. Lara’s response was unshaken, clear, cold, and mildly entertained: “You and your kind will never give me what I want. The Spirits made an unforgivable mistake giving me life among lowly scum like you and my father. I will not stay by your side a minute longer only to die the same way I came into this planet: with nothing!” “You’re the one making the unforgivable mistake, Lara! Your father loves you... and so do I! We will make it! We’ll be happy! Just help me...” Falcar’s eyes and the guards’ lances turned instantly to Lara in anticipation. “Kill him.” And the guards abided by her orders. Lara felt a rush: that single moment where she commanded and the scum below her obeyed was the happiest moment of her life. At last, things were as they should be. And Falcar flashed upon Lara a smile of pure admiration, his black soul oddly thrilled to see a girl of a such stunning beauty and sinister ambition to match. That admiration was all Lara needed to ensure that fateful day was the beginning of her real life as the mistress of the Royal Palace of Aurania... the mistress of Aurania itself.
Her father’s rebellion never struck. No one knows the real reason why. Perhaps he knew there was no chance of success now that his best fighter had deserted him. But it is assumed that he shed heartbroken tears of loss until his last breath... tears induced by the thought that he had unknowingly raised the most wicked, poisonous female of the entire world, who would stand beside the planet’s biggest enemy and rule it with an iron fist while laughing cruelly above the highest tower of the Auranian Palace.
Current Age: 123 (Looks about 21)
Experience: Turned into Aurania’s best non-royal fighter by her father and rebel warriors at 19, fought in two Adonis Tournaments, winning the Stone once.
Most Notable Facial Features: Beautiful, flowing golden hair, very light sky-blue eyes with midnight-blue outer ring, dazzling facial structure
Usual Combat Attire: Tight, belted black-leather tunic covering half of neck to ribcage, diamond-and-sapphire armlets and upper-arm bracelet, tight black-leather pants covering heel to middle of thigh, black-leather and gold-encrusted sash, and knee-length, high-heel midnight-blue boots.
Most-used Weapon: Black Widow Blades: Metallic chakrams snap onto wrists, possessing an inner blade and an outer blade able to pump poison / “Living” whip
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That's an interesting idea Leo. I really can't wait to see all the new twists and turns you have come up with for the new and improved Deadly Dominion I can hardly wait to read the new episodes! 
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