Sounds more like a cheesy battle metal song.

It reminds me of Viking Metal or Power Metal with all the magic and mystical references. I'm working on some lyrics of my own, I should post them when I'm done. I write only three types of lyrics though, they're either dark, depressing, or cheesy romantic ones.

Currently I only play bass in a band that does cover songs of old rock songs from various bands of the 80s and prior times. However, I'm working on recruiting peeps for another band because I want to be a vocalist in a Metalcore band. So right now all I do is practice writing original stuff.

I dont think on negativity.
I thought ur lyrics are funny.
But I dont focus on funny.
My aim is to piss some one off when I rap.
I achieve my goal everytime!
Considering how i am a little shy, I will wait for some one else posts lyrics...

Nice jobs

Here's one I wrote that I call "Stranger". I wrote it to express my feelings towards a girl I know. As I said earlier, I can only write three different types of subject matters (because they're what I can relate to) and they're all either violent/dark, depressing, or about love. This one's about love. I think it's good, and my brother and I were actually trying to turn it into music, he's writing riffs for it.

Stranger
A face reflects through the gates to the soul
Mine are open but yours are closed
Waiting to stare into the eyes to become whole
Oh stranger

Why must I remain so distant never to speak of how I feel
Fires burn my soul yet cannot escape, my eyes are closed
The eternal gaze leaves me waiting to heal
Forever suffering for the life I chose
Never to know the stranger
As she approaches my heartbeat slows
Feel as though my blood is frozen
As she sweeps me off my toes
The gateway to my soul begins to open
For this stranger I do not know
Distance seems to grow as time elapses
Even though you seem so near
Hard to breathe, my lung collapses
Overwhelmed with love and fear
For this stranger so sincere

Stranger
Like a shadow I appear as an empty slate
Blank expressions make up my face
Maybe stranger it was all just fate
Tired of playing the game of chase
As this stranger cracks my frozen heart
I always only admire from a distance
Never wanting us to part
Constant struggles met with resistance
As my feelings to start to grow
What to say, and where to start?
Maybe with a simple hello
Will you hear the cries from the caverns of my heart?
As they echo from down below
Afraid to speak so I just pass you by, forever to be left alone
The reflections of your eyes and the feelings I won't show
Forever you will remain a stranger

Ooh Eeh Ooh Ah Aah Ting Tang Walla Walla Bing Bang!

Now THAT is poetry!


Here is one I did a while ago:

Ba bo be Be baba be ba bo be Be baba be ba bo be Ba ba baa booo beee!

(Some guy stole those lyrics and used them in a popular song from the 90's, I will send a signed CD to whoever gets it)

I feel as if thats Scatman or something like that.

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Shit, good guess man!

Sweet I was right!

Stick to the topic guys. Murcie, you know better.

What is this, Murmur?
As for ZeroSymbolic seventy-one 88's lyrics, they were pretty decent but couldn't there be a little more words in it? If a small number of lyrics is your thing here, I would suggest to make the poetry more cryptic, having some hidden message inside it. I would do that, it could be pretty fascinating.

It's Witchdoctor murmur!

Stoner Rock is a very slow tempo and has large instrumental parts. Gotta leave space for the riffs.

Example: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=d3ORzWqSqws

Sticking to topic: I do enjoy some good stoner rock.

Down, Corrosion of Conformity, Alabama Thunder Pussy, that kind of stuff.

Ramma lamma lamma ka dingadydinkdedong
Shoobop showadawada yippity boom-de-boom
Chang chang changity chang shebop
Dip dedip doowop doowop a dooby-doo
Boogedy boogedy boogedy boogedy shooby doowop shebop
Shanna nanna nanna nanna yippity dip-de-boom

I win.