Okay im not gonna flame, this is my honest opinion.

Its horrible. I dont see why u changed a few colours and drew on a few dots. You have PS right, im sure you can do better. Use the colour grabber and use that for shading if your using paint. And dont say its hard, i have seen Vampyres sprites that were done on paint, and they are great. This isnt a flame, im just being honest...which is what a forum is for right?