Thats cool... a few things though

1. The lines of pen or whatever kind of take away from the picture... isnt there some way you could have removes them or something? I'm not a big PhotoShopper...

2. The clothes are a little bland. I understand where you are coming from... but it has to have a LITTLE bit of colour...

3. Her right hand seems off a little bit... could just be me

4. Adding to number 3, the right arm is kind of large and is large until the covering, until it goes suddenly thin and has a really small wrist

Thats about it! The lines are what really take from the picture... the Sai gesture was just uncalled for and the Sonya-esque panty strap part is a nice touch... 4/5

Hmm. I see. Most of the "arm" stuff was the affect of that big arm flap you saw.

And no. I've never used the pencil tool before, so as far as My knowledge goes, there was no way to clean it up.

And I too agreed the outfit needed some color, which was why I added the pink, but apparently that wasn't enough, I guess. I didn't want to go overboard. Slave was what I was going for anyway, after all.
Personally, although I would never recommend the pencil tool in anything (I only used it cause my scanners broken, so I couldn't really scan what I was doing on my PAPER to the comp), I personally like the affect it gave. The image's cell shading was making it a bit smooth, and what not. The nastyness of photoshop's pencil tool, though unintentional, gave it a bit of a more gritty feeling I think. Which is good! Because this is gritty ole MK, after all.

I like the colors...they really stick out. But as to her body its hard to tell what is happening exactly. The cocept I completly agree with!

Now that I look at it and I'm not tired as much, the pencil effect looks pretty cool! But not on the castle... the castle part is kind of weird looking... but yeah just a little bit more colour IMO, would make the outfit better... not too much though, it would spoil your concept... I also like what you did with the head, with the hat and the scar, that was cool.

What with all this arm flap things lately? They look really really lame.

I kinda like em, Balistic.