That could use some work, to say the least. First of all, I have to say that IMO the whole idea of the comic is stupid. But that's just my opinion. Second, boxes separating each panel would have been a god idea; they help clarify what's going on, and just make the whole thing neater. Third, a background would have made it much better.

I say this not meaning to insult, not meaning to flame, not meaning to make enemies with you, but this is one of the most half-assed sprite comics I've ever seen. It's not funny at all (IMO), it's sloppy and shows almost zero effort. I'm not trying to be mean; it's just that sprite comcis are becoming very popular, and we don't need the Fan Art forum cluttered with half-assed ones like this. I'm not saying stop making sprite comics, but if you're going to keep making them put in a little more time, effort, and humor. I'm sure you can do better than this.

It is my first comic and i dont even know how to make them properly...... i just had a go at it to see what people's responses were like..... obviously i wont make anymore cause i am crap at making them.......I wont clutter up the art forum again..... sob....

No, no, don't take it the wrong way. I think everyone has potential. It's obvious you're new at this. The LAST thing I'm telling you to do is to give up. Keep trying! It shouldn't be too hard to improve your technique. As far as humor, this comic is more slapstick than anything else; I think satire tends to work better. That's what I used in the couple I made a while abck. Check out the humor of some of the other comics, like any of Kombat's, or LadyRaiden's, or TheShirtNinja's. They have some of the best, and I'm sure there's something you can learn from them.

is that your first or is that the nomal for you? Either way it's pretty bad, sorry.

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I don't remember you asking me if you can edit that sig, I made for Error-Macro.