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06/03/2007 10:36 PM (UTC)by
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Jerrod
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Keith
05/24/2007 06:45 PM (UTC)
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Wow, that's really really good. I told myself when I first opened the thread and saw the length of it that I would read it later because I didn't have time. But as soon I started reading I had to read on. Damn you! It's really good though, hope to see more. wink
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LiuKangFighter
05/24/2007 09:10 PM (UTC)
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I really like this, but it makes Jax sound like and intellectual. It just dosn't seem liek Jax. It sounds more like Sonya.
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Elnino
05/24/2007 09:54 PM (UTC)
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Lol, Mr. Lao, anyways this is pretty cool. Is this like between MK3 and more MK's? (I didnt read the whole thing sorry) Because it mentions losing contact with Cyrax and i'm guessing he is lost in Jades desert. Having Jax say His Lord Raiden and Mr. Lao is pretty wierd for Jax to say cuz he says all that dumb crap like "Awwwww yeaaaaaaah" and it just doesnt sound like him.
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TheSilverSurfer
05/25/2007 12:57 AM (UTC)
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Good work Jerrod. The first three paragraphs were good.
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Jerrod
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05/25/2007 05:01 PM (UTC)
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LiuKangFighter Wrote:
I really like this, but it makes Jax sound like and intellectual. It just dosn't seem liek Jax. It sounds more like Sonya.

You guys have to keep in mind that Jax is a part of the system and can't sound like he belongs in the ghetto rap group, especially since, like I said at the bottom of the submission, Jax is addressing high-ranking US officials who will decide whether or not he even fights in the war against the Tekunin on Earth. He can't sound like an idiot when in a meeting with the most powerful people in his organisation.
Elnino Wrote:
Lol, Mr. Lao, anyways this is pretty cool. Is this like between MK3 and more MK's? (I didnt read the whole thing sorry) Because it mentions losing contact with Cyrax and i'm guessing he is lost in Jades desert. Having Jax say His Lord Raiden and Mr. Lao is pretty wierd for Jax to say cuz he says all that dumb crap like "Awwwww yeaaaaaaah" and it just doesnt sound like him.

Like I said, he has to sound official when dealing with people of higher rank than him, just as anyone would in the army/navy.
And this biography is linked to the other fan fictions that I've written based on an alternate storyline that I thought of before MK Deception became official. All the biographies are in my signature; check 'em out when you have time, as it helps if you read them all since they more or less help each other fill certain holes and things. smile
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06/03/2007 10:36 PM (UTC)
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Excellent work, bro. You made Jax credible, which is a damn difficult thing to do lol. I agree with Elnino that Jax saying Mr Lao or his Lord Raiden (though all should say the latter tongue) is odd for him. But it brings about a new part of his personality which is pretty cool.
I like the overall story as well. Jax with leg implants could be going too far though lol. I'd love to see Magneto own him. tongue
Anyway, nice work, bro! It was a good read.
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