Hmm.... for some one who said the following to saiZero, I expected something much more intelligently typed from you.






Please, God... no.

My honest and unbiased opinion: this story is terrible. Your unwillingness to even follow punctuation and capitalization rules of the English language doesn't help either. I don't take you as a writer seriously. You could have at least ran it by MSWord's spelling/grammar check. It only takes a few mouse-clicks out of your life.

“I hope you like it.” Stark replies: “How do you know about S.H.E.I.L.D Mr. Wayne? I didn’t know billionaire playboys follow that sort of thing.” Wayne replies “Please answer the question Mr. Stark, I know the government gave you some new contracts to build a clean energy plant in Fawcett city.” Stark replies again “What’s it to you Mr. Wayne? You’re from Gotham and for someone who spends his time dating supermodels and going on Russian cruises you sure know a lot about me and my work, to which I am inclined to not tell you about.” Wayne gets up from his seat, thanks Stark for his time and leaves. Stark, thinking to himself asks what is it about it made it feel like an interrogation. Stark’s investigating into Bruce Wayne’s companies funds and projects, turning up almost nothing, Stark asks himself why is the science /tech department off the books? He then decides to armor up and investigate. : Wayne tower: Luscious Fox is in the science department working on new gadgets for batman and touching up another new suit, and Tony, in armor is watching on the outside for who comes in and out of Wayne tower. He decides to call it a night but as he’s leaving he sees a man in a cape and cowl that goes into the tower and Stark questions to himself who was that and why here? Thinking it was someone trying to rip off Wayne Tech, Ironman busts through the wall and confronts the mysterious man. Stark asks: “Who are you and why are you here?” The man replies “Stark you don’t understand .......” Stark arms up his pulse blasters and says. “How do you know my name! Who are you?”The man sighs, mumbles something and removes his cowl... It’s Bruce Wayne! Stark in a state of surprise powers down and asks “So you’re the batman everyone is talking about? That explains everything, care to let me in on why you were asking me about an Amanda Weller and shield?” Bruce shares the Intel with Tony” Amanda Weller worked for the United States government and went off grid a year ago, based on the leads all I turned up was a organization called S.H.E.I.L.D. and your name came up saying you and the Avengers teamed up with them to take down that alien threat that happened in New York city.” Tony replies “Bruce, I never met Amanda Weller and the Avengers got put together through S.H.E.I.L.D., Nick Fury was the head master of that animal, the agents I met were nick fury, agent Culson , Natasha Romanoff a.k.a. Black Widow and Hawkeye.” Bruce continues telling tony more “Before Weller went off grid she was on a project titled Orion which S.H.E.I.L.D. funds and has to do with something in outer space. That’s all I can find.” Tony thinks for a minute and replies “If we work together, I think I can find out through a source that deals with such things.....” Batman replies” I usually work alone, but let’s do it!” Tony and Bruce head back to Stark Industries and tony contacts Peter Quill a.k.a. Star Lord. Stark runs the Intel from Bruce to Quill and he replies “We have seen some activity but nothing that indicates a threat or imbalance and this “Amanda Weller” sounds familiar, because I ran her name through the sword data base and something popped up about meeting with a “Thall Sinestro” at the Luna base on the moon and apparently S.W.O.R.D is involved with the project as well.” Bruce in shock says “Sinestro!!!!!!!!!! That guy is a real dick, what is she doing with him? : Stark asks: “Who is Sinestro?” Bruce replies “A former Green Lantern that went rouge, became a dictator on his home world, started a war with the green lantern corps, and was banished to the anti matter universe... He is also very effeminate.” “Bruce uses his Comlink “Hal this is Batman, Sinestro is making a move by meeting with Amanda Weller, get the green lantern corps to meet with the guardians of the galaxy, this is not a drill, you must hurry? : Hal replies via ring” Bruce let me grab John, Guy, Kyle and Simon... wait who are the guardians of the galaxy?” “Never mind Hal! I am here with Ironman, we will meet you aboard the ship to discuss a plan on how to deal with this as an alliance” To be continued!

I tried to fix what I could, but the story is practically broken.

Having your grammar and spelling corrected by an eleven-year-old tells me something about your level of intelligence. I suggest that you refrain from misguidedly labeling people as "mentally challenged" when you--a guy who appears to be in his mid-twenties--make mistakes that even an elementary school student is able to rectify. Since we're being presumptuous, I may as well take a shot and say that you were born and raised in the south. That would certainly explain your intellectual ineptitude, seeing as how the southern states have some of the worst school systems in the entire country. Look at some basic English lessons and try again.

Dude, you are apparently 29 years old, and you throw insults at people like you're just shy of 11.

Leave those people alone, and try gaining some maturity before you decide to criticize someone else, especially for their intellect.

Reply if you wish; I will not respond.




@TheGame100gunzAndClips, Sorry for my off-topic post. As for the story, it is very difficult to read, due to the grammar. Could you maybe rewrite it so it can be more legible?

Okay, so you're perfectly within your rights to take an unprovoked and laughably inapt shot at me, but when I do so, no matter the truthfulness behind the slight, no matter how insolent the target, it's objectionable. I'm sure that makes sense in your supercilious world, but to any reader with an average level of perceptiveness, your actions would simply be hypocritical.

Stick to failing to impress us with your amateurish, monotonous, and discordant noise tracks, because you're not competent enough to analytically assess anything, let alone butt heads with this giant. Nice try, though. *laughs*

On topic: This story was pretty bland. It was neither thrilling nor interesting. What made it worse was how poorly you organized ur thoughts and text.

good job for mwgrant for TRYING to make this story better FOR U.



So ur gonna sit there and call venomark out for his insults (which thegame earned all on his own) but not call thegame out who started this whole debacle? if ur not willing to take ur head out of the ass and see the big picture of this situation, leave ur opinion to urself.



Good. ur rebuttal would be meaningless



Exactly. Whats even more pathetic is he didnt even bother to put his own insult through spell check before saying that to me.

You need to fix that paragraphing pronto, dude. I can't tell if you actually wrote the story all as one paragraph or if MKO's formatting screwed it up. Either way, you should fix it because, no offense, I can't be bothered to navigate that wall of text to read the story.

From what I can see so far though, you should make sure you capitalize names and make sure you abbreviate right, i.e instead of "mr wayne" it should be "Mr. Wayne".

Someone needs to move this thread here.

An eleven year-old from the NORTH!

It would have been easier to read if it wasn't on big chunk of a paragraph, I guess you can edit your previous post and space out your story so it's a bit cleaner to read. But, you need to follow the rules of grammar. Pronouns get capitalized, always, that always bugs me when people cannot capitalize names that need to be capitalized.

Also, Jesus, can I look at some fan submissions where people aren't rude to anyone and just be nice? Give critiques that don't include insults whether or not people are in the middle of a fight on some other thread? It's so tiresome to keep seeing that every now and then on this forum, it's no wonder why other users hardly come on this part of the site anymore.

i tried


ill just post the link from tym where i originally wrote it at


im tazzmission over there

http://testyourmight.com/threads/for-those-who-like-to-write.27577/page-2

Actually, the drama is what kept a good number of the users in this area of the site entertained, even when artistic pieces were being submitted on a regular basis. Like I've stated previously, and I don't intend to seem condescending, you weren't an active user at the time that this forum was peaking in terms of the amount of traffic that it received. Otherwise, you'd be well aware of the fact that people actually got some level of entertainment out of seeing users butt heads with one another.

Personally, I believe what's more frustrating is when you see the likes of you and Riyakou willing to reply in droves in your own threads, but when it comes time to offer your opinion in threads containing fake pictures or any artistic piece, you're nowhere to be found. There's also a fair amount of bitching and moaning about users being too mean, which is no less annoying than the bickering.

Since you've failed to notice, the primary reason that the FanSub forum has increased in traffic over the past few months is that users like myself are actually making a concentrated effort to ensure that it remains active. I may not be submitting artwork as frequently as I'd like, but I'm helping youngsters in the fake picture industry realize their full potential and aiding them in their development. In my opinion, the reason that this forum has become so listless of late is that certain users have become so self-absorbed that they're disinclined to contribute a response, whether it be positive or negative, lengthy or concise, to a thread that was not coined under their username. Unless the least supportive users are whining about the unkind critiques being handed out, then they continue to act selfishly by remaining faithful to their own threads.

That is all.

wait are you implying i'm from the south? i'm from chicago you cunt.


to bad your father didnt punch your mother in the stomach when she was 5 months pregnant with you

Actually, I like when forums are active that doesn't include stupid arguments on who can write the better insult. And no offense, I don't really care for Fakes, but that's not to say I don't peek my head into the dozens of threads of them and see what's up... I just don't have anything to say about them.

Although I think it's kinda pathetic to see someone who asks for a little maturity, gets told that it's better to read nonsense and stupid high school fights rather than nice things.

That was just lousy (like all of your elementary verbal attacks).
Not only because your insult failed to meet the standards of a third grader, but because you didn't even bother to spell words correctly or put in the proper punctuation. After all, if you're going to call out saiZero for being, what you refer to as, mentally handicapped for not spelling words correctly (which she did, all she did was simply use spelling shortcuts because she's on her phone 90% of the time), then set a good example. If you can't, then fuck off and apologize to her.

I cannot believe you would act like such a pussy and get angry like a 13 year old school girl who just got dumped because I told you not to post news without proof. What a big hissy fit over nothing. Oh but I apparently am the one who needed to calm down. I guess I'm just too rainbow bright for you.

lol someones on there man rag

Marvelous.

You're surprisingly observant for someone with the aptitude of a neanderthal. I bet your primitive lineage is a majority of the reason that Illinois is closing in on the bottom of the stack in terms of education.



So, you openly condone domestic violence. It's no wonder that you're still a lonely, gawky virgin. No female in her right mind would give a proud woman-beater the time of day, let alone one with the ears of a chimpanzee and orangutan-like facial hair. Come to think of it, considering your caveman-like appearance, that neanderthal comment has really come full circle.

You really need some better material, you inbred Napoleon Dynamite lookalike. Though, given your username, I wouldn't expect anything better than insults that I haven't heard since I was fifteen-years-old.



Actually, I never stated that bickering should have precedence over whining. I said, and I quote, "There's also a fair amount of bitching and moaning about users being too mean, which is no less annoying than the bickering." To clarify, openly whimpering about arguments taking place is, more or less, equally as tiresome as the arguments themselves.

Virtually every time that someone complains about the existence of the occasional spat, he or she is doing so in a patronizing manner, consequently instigating a separate dispute. Case in point: "Actually, I like when forums are active that doesn't include stupid arguments on who can write the better insult." There was no need for you to include "stupid" or be presumptuous in claiming that the parties in disagreement are merely trying to find out "who can write the better insult." You're only stooping to our level when you (probably naively) resort to such contradictory behavior.

my dating life is just fine and dandy what about yours?
lol woman beater? i never hit a woman in my life

and trust me i have far better matterial but choose not to use it since it is to soon for that sort of thing

id rather look like a caveman instead of some fatass who looks like rosie o donnel who masterbates with a turkey baster

I would say this is a clear-cut case of an adolescent fool stuck in a man's body, but it's more than obvious what you have is nothing even close to it. Your imagination is blatantly limited to your own pitiful life experiences. With each attack you attempt, you continue to reveal story elements of your own biography and it's actually quite entertaining rather than offensive. If my presumptions of your low life incorrect, it doesn't hinder the apparent intellectual limitations of your brain that radiate from your rebuttals.



That's funny. I suppose you're one of the people who are going to be ignorant enough to point the finger at just VenoMark and myself without taking into consideration that this forum fell apart during our absence.

What you fail to realize is what set MKO apart from other forums was users' ability to argue out there differences without insta-bans, and (some) mods had the decency to investigate the initial cause of the argument and begin their judgement there. As soon as the Nazi Police-esque mods came along I saw through my very own observant eyes things change for the worse.

It's not hard for some one to say "I am sorry saiZero for calling you mentally handicapped for the way you type even though I can't spell and user grammar well enough myself, and I am sorry blacksaibot for exploding at you when you clearly typed your response calmly and never even through the first insult." But what we got instead was horse shit in the form middle school level insults thrown at me.

But you know what? It was my fault for not being the bigger man and ignoring his stupidity and forgiving his PMS-like attitude a few days ago. I should have just moved on, but at times when you mess with this bull you are sure to get the horns. If I can for give UR, this should be no sweat. That said, this is the last time I refer to this user's existence and will try not to throw his hypocrisy in his face.

^^^Well forget about all that noise...

Taz, it looks a lot better on the site you linked, but it still has all the same flaws with spelling. It looks like you made it in script form. In that case, you don't need to use the word "Replies" before the colon. Instead it would look something like this:

Stark: How do you know about S.H.I.E.L.D Mr. Wayne? I didn't know playboy billionaires follow that sort of thing.

Wayne: Please answer the question, Mr. Stark, I know the government gave you some new contracts to build a clean energy plant in Fawcett City.

To correct the paragraphing on this site you have to put <br/> twice. Just spacing it doesn't work for some reason. It's old coding or something.

thanks for the possitive feedback and i wrote it in script form because this would be a video game idea.

think of a rpg title set in both the dc and marvel universe with charachter choices like mass effect 1.

i was going to post the finale but i feel like utter shit today

you call me a child and yet you still continue this argument not just in here but other threads as well. for someone who claims hes king you sure bitch like a queen
the fact you made a rainbow bright fag icon with my image just go's to show what type of twerp you are. i could play your game but i dont think brining your love of your life into it is fare to her.
your older than i am and look at you still going on and on like a broken shallow man

What's that got to stop you?



I'm not pointing fingers at anyone other than having to state that you know who you are for those that constantly need to whine and bicker towards other users who have issues with the OP. (And I'm referring the OP to anyone, not just the OP for this thread) And last time I checked, you two aren't the only ones that provides a lot for this forum, so no, I won't praise either of you two for making this forum still go on because you two aren't the only ones.



But with everything else, I just have to say this... since you're smart enough to say that it is your fault for not letting the fire die down, you should have. I mean, if the guy wants to continue acting like a jackass, let him keep acting like one so that he faces a ban or whatever, while you and other users stay around. I mean, if this guy continues to make threads on this forum, am I going to keep seeing this? Or will people actually let bygones be bygones and just grow up a bit? That too hard to ask? Even with people who are asking for the insults to stop, we're getting lashed at like this is an insult to you guys... The fuck, how does THAT make any sense?