Yeah, your story could use much revision, but I do like the concept. Fujin was always one of my MK4 favorites, and I've always thought him to be full of potential. With a nice costume revamp (i.e. Ermac, Noob-Smoke, etc) and moves, he would make a nice entry into MK7.

I'm still a fan of Raiden, though, and I'd like them to team up against a foe, rather than be foes themselves.

Thanks

I would like Fujin to become the new protector of Earthrealm since Raiden became all psycho...
I like ur story...
My idea for Fujin is for him to have a rotating sword-lance type deal like Dinobot from Beat Wars... don't kno if anyone remembers... And since we have enough telekinetics and "spinners" (Ashrah and Kung Lao), he should have some cool new powers... like wind bombs... or a projectile returner (If nightwolf is gone)
His fatalities could be a wind-sucking fat. either asfixiating the opponent or sucking them into a black hole type of deal, and a pressure crusher

Beast Wars, CGI at its finest

Megatron, Terrorize!!

Im going to make more this is fun

Shao Kahn
Origin: Outworld
Alignment: Evil
Allies: Havik, Raiden,Goro, Kintaro,Motaro
Foes: Onaga, Quan Chi, Shang Tsung, Tarkatans

"The Evil Thunder god Raiden resurrected me to destroy Onaga the Dragon King. I had to fulfill my wish to get Outworld for myself again. I
entered Onaga's Throne room and I used my War hammer to smash Onaga Kamidogus, Onaga lost his main power. Then I Smashed Onaga's head. Onaga had fallen to my treachery once more. With Onaga defeated Outworld is once again mine, and although Onaga is dead I took advantage of him and I used his heart to resurrect my Allies: Kintaro, Goro, Motaro and all the Shokan army. Alot of my former allies betrayed me and they will pay with their lives. Everyone will fear Shao Kahn once more." Short too, but the original bios are short too

Once again, one can tell that it lacks a lot of detail and depth, but the concept would be good for a game like MK:T 2

hehe XiahouDun84 stories are excellent compared to mine

I like

Liu Kang
Origin: Earthrealm
Alignment: Good
Allies: Kung Lao, Shujinko, Kitana
Foes: Onaga, Raiden, Shinnok, Shao Kahn

"The sorcerrer Shang Tsung killed me with the help of his ally Quan Chi.
My spirit didnt go to heaven because my body is controlled by an unknown force. Kung Lao and all my friends were killed in the fight against the Deadly Alliance. Now that Onaga the former emperor of outworld is dead with the Deadly Alliance I must search my body and discover what force control it."

"I got sucked into a portal that leads to a Unknown realm. The creatures in this realm are more evil than the creatures in the netherealm. Then I discovered that my body is controlled by a powerful sorcerrer that even strong than the Deadly Alliance. Now i must stop him before my body will be in his full command.

what do you think?

If that's a remake of his Deception bio, I think it needs far more work. And its too much of a copy from Deception to move onto another game.

And I say we keep the amount of realms the way they are, because there is no way a realm can have creatures "more evil" than the Netherrealm. The Netherrealm has lower planes for creatures like that.

ohhh ok.....

Maybe you could try Ermac...

is your name DECEPTION in the chat room?

Noob Saibot
Origin: Netherealm
Alignment: Evil
Allies: Smoke, The Brotherhood of Shadows.
Foes: Sub-Zero, Raiden, Sareena

I was a member in the Lin Kuei before Scorpion killed me. After Scorpion killed me, I was sent to the netherealm, there my former Master Shinnok turned me into an evil creature. My soul was consumed by the evilness of the netherealm and I have became a wraith with a powerful power. My former master Shinnok used me to assasinate the Emperor of Outworld-Shao Kahn. I had failed to do that and I was sent to the netherealm once again. I discovered that my former Master was killed by the sorcerrer Quan Chi. Now that I got freed from my master, I formed an alliance with a cyborg called Smoke. I programed him to do all my commands. Using his Nano Technology I will be able to create an army of cyborg demons which will fulfill all my wishes. Everyone will feel the wrath of Noob-Smoke.

What do you think?

You've got to be more creative, and the stories are way too short.

meh just did it for fun

OMG! i got skulled because i asked "what do you think"?

this is pathedic

It was probably an accident on behalf of another mod... I'll correct it for you.
Though, I would like to ask one thing of you: Next time, instead of posting 2 or 3 messages back-to-back, could you go back and edit your post to add anything else you might have left out? I'd appreciate it if you did.

First I have to say that just because the actual MK biographies are short doesn't mean you have to limit yourself to their length; it's YOUR bio to write, make it as long as you need it to be.

Your Noob Saibot bio's pretty much a repeat of his MKD bio, you should add more detail to it, make it more original.

Your Liu Kang bio's too rushed, you don't even explain how he happens to find a random portal that leads to another realm, or how he even gets back into his body (was it with magic, was there someone who helped him, etc.). Those are details that you need to figure out.

Shao Kahn's bio is too boring and simple; "I walked into Onaga's house, smashed his furniture with a hammer, and then him." I just summed up the bio you wrote for him. Where's the action? Where's the struggle? This is supposed to be a battle of titans, not "Whack-A-Mole". You had also written in Fujin's bio that it was he and Goro who killed Onaga, but you didn't even mention Goro until he was ressurected by Kahn when he took Onaga's heart. That part was creative, but it wasn't consistent with what you wrote for Fujin and that's a big no-no (another note: just because MK can get away with retcons doesn't mean you should follow their example ).

You got to become more creative and more detailed with your work.

Thanks i will try to do it. Its my first time

Give a DP to my Noob-Saibot bio and close this thread.

Closed at the authors request!