Very good, man! The voodoo aspect is very unique. That'd be really cool! The Fatalities are also pretty good too!

Thanks Tgrant. As I say with the story - its shit so far, but I didn't really wan't to go overboard with it...I wanted to have a feeling of Mystery and make it empty. Ill work on it later and add somethings, but I will develop all about her alot more, I don't think her name is good, but I might change it to something different, what do you think guys?

Feel free to post your ideas and comments on this...

I like it as it is. Although her story needs a little more work.

Here's a character concept of mine.

Nemesi’s bio

Name: Nemesi

Owner: tgrant

Age: Eternal (unknown if he is immortal)

Sex: Male

Weight: Unknown (slim - slight build)

Race: God/Human

Family: Father: Raiden

Mother: Unknown

Group: Aligned with Jada and the Earth warriors.

Clan: N/A

Side: Good

Eyes: None. Electrical. Change colour dependent on mood. Occasionally flare.

Hair: Short, black and spiky. Electricity runs through it (up and down the spikes too), making the hair stand on end. Because of his charged hair, he can use himself as a lightning rod when he is weak. The lightning bolt will give him extra strength and power, whilst also rejuvenating his health. (He can also change his hairstyle at will because of he charged nature.)

Look: Wears a long dark blue trench coat that is tied around the waist. Wears black gloves that have a lightning bolt on the palm. Wears a necklace, made of silver that his father gave to him. It is shaped like a lightning bolt and has some very special powers.

Weapons and styles: Nemesi is skilled with many earthly weapons, due to his long time on Earth. He has more skill with most weapons than those who use them expertly on Earth do. Due to his godly nature, he can wield any unknown weapon expertly too. However, his weapon of choice is the Staff. Unlike his father however, his staff is made from pure electrical energy. Although it is in a solid unmoving state, which he can manipulate at will. (Behaves just like a normal staff. If he thrust it through someone he would then have it return to its normal energy state, meaning the electrical energy is released in that persons body, killing him or her instantly.) When struck, the enemy is shocked slightly, even when they block an attack, allowing him to take advantage and attack once again. (Also allows for extra damage when hits actually connect.)

No one else can wield this weapon. (Except his father!)

Nemesi is trained in many styles. He has learnt Mantis, Shaolin Fist, Crane, Tae Kwon Do, Judo and Ninjitsu, to name a few. He has also learned several styles not known to mortal men. His vast expertise in styles and weaponry make him a force to be reckoned with. Has trained with his father, who taught him Nan Chuan and Jujutsu. He has trained for many years in these styles among others. He is unpredictable in Kombat, for the enemy will never know what he will unleash.

Powers: Wields the wrath of thunder and lightning just like his father. Has enhanced telekinetic and psychic abilities. (He does not use cheesy arm movements when using his telekinetic abilities. He will just stand there and move things with his mind. Looks almost thisthingisdisabledless.) These psychic abilities are enhanced due to his mix of human and godly intelligence. Due to the mix of his powers, styles and expertise in weaponry, he is extremely formidable in battle. He mixes all of these in battle, proving to be extremely formidable in battle. (But has yet to defeat his father, Raiden in friendly Kombat.)

Special Moves:

Disable (1): Disables all of the opponent’s special attacks temporarily.

Disable (2): Disables opponent completely. They are unable to move. Allows for a free attack.

Confusion: Uses his psychic powers to make the opponent confused. They attack other adversaries or themselves.

Torpedo: Same as Raiden’s.

Lightning Blast: Standard electrical projectile.

Lightning Strike: Summons a bolt of lightning to strike the enemy.

Psyonic Jolt: Induces the enemy with a headache using telekinesis to transfer electricity into their head.

Thunder Wave: Throws a spark of electricity on the ground. It splits in thousands of different beams that seek the opponent. They will seek the opponent, even if jumped.

Staff: Can control his staff using his mind. Prefers to ride (surf) on top of it. Whilst surfing on the staff, Nemesi shoots projectiles at the opponent as well as throwing random objects from around the arena at them. (Can have a small number of weapons simultaneously attack the enemy).

Fatality 1: Telekinetic Rip.

Levitates the enemy in the air. He begins to concentrate on their body. The opponent’s arms stretch out. They become rigid and they scream in pain. After a few seconds, their arms fly off, flying across the arena. After more screaming, their head and torso split down the centre. Their body pieces drop to the floor in a pool of blood.

Fatality 2: Impalement Electrocution.

Rams his lightning staff into the opponent (as explained before). The staff glows and then it disappears as it takes its true form, as pure electrical energy. A wave of electricity is seen spread across the opponent as they explode. Their few tiny remains are scattered around the arena.

Bio:

Nemesi has kept himself as a recluse for centuries, training in many martial arts forces and honing his powers and skills. He has been fuelled by his anger towards the Elder Gods, those he believed him to be an outcast, because he is part human. Those who believe that he will never amount to anything great. Those who believe he can never live up to his father. He has ignored his father’s wishes to help him aid the Earth warriors against the forces of Outworld, despite the fact that he knows how important the situation is. Now Nemesi abandons his training. He chooses now to fight alongside the Earth warriors and his father. He will attain revenge for his father by destroying the bane of his existence Shao Khan. He will make himself known as one of the great warriors of Earth realm and he will show the Elder Gods that he is no mere mortal. He has his own stand to make towards the eyes of the Elder Gods and he will make this stand and show them that he is more than the mere mortal they claim him to be. He hopes that one-day he will join his father in the Pantheon and become a god such as he. Though he has gained the respect from his father, Nemesi wishes for respect from the Elder Gods. Only time will show if he will receive his long life dream - to be seen and respected as a god by the Elder Gods.

umm TGRANT i just wanna say thanks for participating in my threads you are like the only one thanks man.

"kitana went this way I can smell her perfume"

I was partially inspired by Mcfarlanes - Voodoo Queen from the Mcfarlane Monsters figure line, but with modifications and intergrated into the MK Universe

here is a sketch and a screen :




Sarakia:

Origin: Outworld
Age: 3000+ years
Height: Unknown
Weight: Unknown
Alignment: Evil
Status: Voodoo Queen
Links: Nightwolf and The Dragon King

Appearance: Black dreaded hair with little spikes dangling from below, Black eyes. Face painted white, with red markings.

Bio:

Believed to have been dead for centuries, Sarakia re-emerges from the bowels of the Netherrealm as soon as the Dragon King is reawakened.
No one or nothing truly knows why she suddenly reappears as soon as The Dragon King returns but someone does...The Dragon King himself. The secrets entangled within his spirit are to be unveiled, the ulterior motives exposed...However alongside with this she has one other mission which in her eyes...needs fufilling.
Now apparent to Sarakia is that Shang Tsung possesses the RuneStone. The Runestone is the centrefold of The Dark Art's and Sarakia is determined to reclaim which was once her tribes.
Sarakia will make a horde full off enemies but will adverse to manipulating them to get her further to her goals. She will reobtain the Runestone....She will Annialate the Dragon King.
But blind to her is that some unknown force is ressurecting the deceased members of her Tribe and converting them over to eliminate her before she comes into contact with Shang Tsung and the Dragon King...She will have to maintain stability and to use warriors to help fend off her fellow Shamans'. As she once was confined in the Shadows, she will prove to be a Queen to be feared of....And in doing so she will destroy Outworld's minions,conjoin with its adversaries and create Outworld in her own Mytholigcal,twisted Image.........


Fighting Styles:

- Capoeria
-Von Kar Hai
- Spear

Special Moves.

- Shrunken Heads
Withdrawng a bunch of Shrunken heads from her belt she throws a bunch of them, splattering upon impact

-Whisp
br>Clouding the opponent in Mist- intoxicating them - temporarily immobilizing them

- Cretin Spawn
Using her Talisman, she creates a small creature to leap onto the opponent knocking them down while slashing them, the cretin then returns into the eye of the talisman

- Whiplash
Using her hair with spikes in it, she lashes the opponent multiple times with her hair

- Thorny
Lunging forth a rope with thorns embedded in it, swiping the opponent and pulling them towards her by their ankles


Hari Kari (Suicide)

Takes out a Voodoo doll which is bonded to her soul and scrunches it in pieces - thus doing the same to her - bloody.

Fatality 1 - Scorned

Withdrawing her talisman she spears it towards them impaling them in the chest - it catches alight with Blue flames and engulfs the opponent and then the flames dissapear - leaving the alive victim horribly burnt. Then their head starts to shink and Sarakia rips it off and puts it with her collection of Shrunken Heads

Fatality 2
Sarakia withdraws a voodoo doll and chants an incantation - she then starts to toy with the doll and thus the opponent starts to react like she is doing to the doll. She then rips off the dolls arm and then starts to beat the doll with it - the opponent doing this also, beating them to a pulp. She then twists the doll and then snaps it in half along with the opponent...

Now That story is very rough and I have to work on it later...She is like a Voodoo Queen who was bansihed to the Netherrealm, Ill change it later and make it better later on today

*UPDATE* - Edited the story but I think I have made it worse, agree? I added some additional tibits also!

Updated story...

No one intrested then?

As I say I will use this thread to post other character ideas and just change the thread title

Updated

It's great. Very good. I would like to see her in MKD.

Great idea...lol I actually have the line of Monsters that the Voodoo Queen is in and I thought of her immediately when I read that...

Here's an idea of mine.

Pirida Faime

AGE: 1000+
BORN: Ancient Rome
OCCUPATION: Sorceress
REALM: Netherealm
ALIGNMENT: Neutral
BIO: Pirida Faime was the daughter of a Roman senator in Ancient Rome. She was a powerful sorceress who accompanied the roaming armies as they conquered all the lands on Earth.

Shang Tsung came to her during the time of the Original Mortal Kombat tournament, asking for a bargain: her aid in the destruction of Kung Lao, with the promise of a realm of her own to rule. Pirida fought well but was ultimately defeated. She was cast to Netherealm by Shao Kahn for her insolence.

Now, thousands of years later, the rise of the Dragon King has freed her from her fiery prison. She escaped Netherealm with Scorpion with one intent: to exact revenge against Shang Tsung...and while she's at it, take control of the Dragon King herself.
STYLES: Krav Maga
Caster (A style of lots of magical attacks and TK slams
WEAPON: Clawed Gloves
APPEARANCE: Pirida is a slim Italian beauty, with dark hair and eyes, olive skin. She wears a slitted, skintight black dress and black stilettos.

I'll put moves and fatalities later if anyone is interested.

Thanks for the feed back/ I wrote another story on her this afternoon and its alot better than the previous one (its long by the way) so look out for it later on today,

Tyrant-Cenobite

Thanks for the feed back/ I wrote another story on her this afternoon and its alot better than the previous one (its long by the way) so look out for it later on today,

Tyrant-Cenobite

I think that your ideas for Sarakia are very creative and it sounds like she would be an interesting character for MK.

I like the Sarakia idea alot. Its a twist cuz there has neva been a character like that. Cool idea. The fatals/special moves are pretty cool too. The other characters u guys came up wit are pretty cool as well.

I really like your idea - especially the whole voodoo aspect because it's something we've never really seen in a Mortal Kombat before. Another reason I like is...well, it's kinda silly...but the first time I saw it I switched the syllables around and saw Kiasara...(maybe I'm dyslexic...) and Kiasara = Kyocera...like the phone!!!...k...not so funny...lol

In response to the that nemesis character,it got me thinking of a another possible character. How about a God called Chaos[Who is the God of anarachy]. He would come in the form of a young teenage boy,who is very immature and wild But very powerful. I just thought he could be one of a new generation of young fighters who get ushered into the new mks and will get developed as the series goes on. They will eventually get more important roles for example your nemesis character would eventually take over from raiden and chaos would eventually mature into the main threat to earth. I was thinking he would be the main rival of nemesis,with chaos being outraged that a demi God should enter the conflict before him.NEwhos i thought it would be good to see a small young powerful fighter in the mix up.

WRDLFE21 Wrote: umm TGRANT i just wanna say thanks for participating in my threads you are like the only one thanks man. "kitana went this way I can smell her perfume"

No problem dude!

dandabrit: My characters name is Nemesi, not Nemesis! lol Your character of Chaos sounds cool. And your idea of Nemesi taking over from Raiden was an idea I had before.

Haha oOPS my bad, reading has never been one of my strong points*covers his face in shame

21/3/04 - UPDATED STORY - ADDED ENDING!!!

Sarakia:

Origin: Outworld
Age: 3000+ years
Height: Unknown
Weight: Unknown
Alignment: Evil
Status: Voodoo Queen
Links: Nightwolf and The Dragon King

Bio:


Bio:

A woman who became a legend in Outworld centuries ago...her memory still lives in their nightmares...Her untimely inevitable death struck her realm like an earthquake, her tribe spiralled into chao's.
During her expansive life she mastered every Voodoo incantation and spell and of coure the Dark Arts. Sarakia then became an inpregnable force to be dealt with, always protecting her realm of Kearenia.
Although her skills were simply drastic, she was unintentionally slain by Shao Kahn who had been an inch from death, with once last strike he flushed her into the Netherrealm, concealing her body and soul in a tomb, then lowered into the lava...
Then Shao Kahn did the unthinkable - slaughtered all of her fellow Tribesmen alongside the Great Shamans' and the Witch Doctor, then claimed her realm as his....
But something happened..........
With the rise of the Dragon King, he unintentionally created a rift between the Netherrealm and Outworld, causing millions of Outworlders to plummet into the Netherrealm and millions of minions from the Netherrealm to resurface again...this included Sarakia, acknowledging all of what happened after her death, learing of her realms' inprisionment by Shao Kahn.
Determined to reclaim her realm, she locates the souls of her fellow Tribesmen, etc and ressurects then from the deceased, successful in doing so, she travels back to her home realm only to discover that The Outworld Emperor is dead and her realm released from his grasp, constructing her realm into its original sick, sadistic form...Only once again to be hailed as the "Voodoo Queen".
Excelling further into new methods of Voodoo, Sarakia has more depth into her arsenal.
But something trapped inside her soul is about to be unveiled...by the Dragon King, who has a somewhat unclear connection with her. Hell bent on annihalating the Dragon King to keep her Ulterior secrets hidden, she still has another two destined objectives.
The first is to claim a necklace worn by her arch adversary Nitara - so she can diverse throughout realms but most importantly to gain access to the Exposed Netherrealm to unite and bargain with the Oni who are currently spawning forth a new legion, hungered for flesh...BUT...most disturbing of all, plans to capture Edenia as a foundation, to eliminate all the Edenians and transform the realm of beauty and tranquility into her own dark, twisted image...
No one knows to dars to discover her true intentions and still the connection between her and the Dragon King remains to be seen. She will play an integral part in either the Destruction of Outworld or more importantly Earthrealm..
Promising to spread the fear once again...........


Ending:

The mutilated corspes of Kitana, Sindel and the rest of the Edenians lay benath Sarakia's feet. The realm of Edenia now merges into Sarakia's dream, her tribesmen hail her as she has been responsible for the death of thousands, one of her destined missions completed...
Sarakia knew that the Dragon King was becoming increasingly stronger but with the combined force of her tribe and thge Oni, they were set to be a good contender, then then then travelled back to the rejeuvenating Netherrealm to obtain all its souls to use in an incantation which could vanquish the Dragon King for good. Then, the united force marched into the derelict Outworld and wagered war against all...They slaughtered thousands of enemies from different races and they had lost only half a dozen of warriors. Cackling at the lifeless bodies of Rayden and the chosen warriors from Earthrealm.
The ultimate showdown was now to commence between her and the Oni and the Dragon King and his undefeatable army...
It was the most brutal and extreme battle in Outworlds history! The Dragon King was severely wounded but his will against death repelled, but Sarakia was barely scrapped nor was her Tribe as they had use a spell to sheild and reflect attacks
The Dragon Kings armies numbers hit a downfall and a miniscule amount still stood. But betrayal arose when an unknown force converted the Oni to their cause and the Oni then started to last out at Sarakia and her tribe, their shield spell suddenly became dormant, leaving them vulnerable to death. In a strange turn of events the Onis' were no match for Sarakia and her tribe and the entire legion of Oni was erased from existence, their mangled corspes were all that remained, their souls disintergrated, Sarakia was on the brink of victory until another batch of adversaries lunged into her tribe on the deathlands - the remainder of Earths Forces, The Elder Gods implemented an explosve cameo but soon returned to the heavens as they could not withstand the substantial damage which was being dished out. The shokans emerged swaying their quadrouple arms in fury, then an unexpected, familliar, allegedly death force arrived...Shao Kahn.
Shao Kahn made a temporary alleigance with Sarakia to destory the Dragon King and she agreed only until the Dragon Kings death would they turn on each other. Shao Kahn released the Nomads from the portal led by Baraka and Mileena and they savagely tore into the Dragon Kings army.
The numbers from all forces started to diminish, the battlefield looked liked an overpopulated graveyard. The Dragon King still had the Undefeatable army but they suddenly started to destruct themselves crumbling into the floor. The Dragon King was blind to see that the Sorceror had reclaimed the amulet and destoryed the army. Upon Realization the Dragon King multiated the sorceror into a pulp and absorbed his soul.
Then a suprise attack surfaced, Shao Kahn retaliated into Srakia's Tribe, assasinating them all, destorying the spell to slaughter the dragon king, leaving Sarakia for dead.
The two emperors clashed together in an explosive showdown, face to face they duelled it out. After an extensive viscious fight, Shao Kahn leered over the erupting carcass of the Dragon King...
Outworld was engulfed in flames as the Netherrealm finally overtook Outworld. The blaze wiped everything from existence, apart from Sarakia who in the brink of time traversed to Earthrealm escaping the Inferno............


Fighting Styles:

- Capoeria
- Von Kar Hai
- Spear

Special Moves.

- Shrunken Heads
Withdrawng a bunch of Shrunken heads from her belt she throws a bunch of them, splattering upon impact

- Whisp
Clouding the opponent in Mist- intoxicating them - temporarily immobilizing them

- Cretin Spawn
Using her Talisman, she creates a small creature to leap onto the opponent knocking them down while slashing them, the cretin then returns into the eye of the talisman

- Thorny
Lunging forth a rope with thorns embedded in it, swiping the opponent and pulling them towards her by their ankles


Hari Kari (Suicide)

Takes out a Voodoo doll which is bonded to her soul and scrunches it in pieces - thus doing the same to her - bloody.

Fatality 1 - Scorned

Withdrawing her talisman she spears it towards them impaling them in the chest - it catches alight with Blue flames and engulfs the opponent and then the flames dissapear - leaving the alive victim horribly burnt. Then their head starts to shink and Sarakia rips it off and puts it with her collection of Shrunken Heads

Fatality 2
Sarakia withdraws a voodoo doll and chants an incantation - she then starts to toy with the doll and thus the opponent starts to react like she is doing to the doll. She then rips off the dolls arm and then starts to beat the doll with it - the opponent doing this also, beating them to a pulp. She then twists the doll and then snaps it in half along with the opponent...


Now That story is very rough and I have to work on it later...She is like a Voodoo Queen who was bansihed to the Netherrealm, Ill change it later and make it better later on today

Updated her story and added ending - i feel it adds more depth and detail in her and links her to several people to ensure she has links!

WOW!!!

That story was wicked!!! I loved it.

There were so many great ones too! Tgrants is awesome too!

Dude I loved the way you started the story!!! The use of dark words is my style.

It made me feel the character, VERY creative! I love the Hari Kari fatality, Lol. She should shrunk her own head!

That concept is cool, there shoudl be mk characters like that! ́

Overall, excellent character! I loved it!

Thanks dude, your partly responsible for her ending anyhow. I got the inspiration from your story, you know where the Dragon King wins, but I used that concept and edited it and gave it a twist but as I say, I have donw a few more bios and endings - 3 new character and 6 old characters, I'll post em' up soon!

tyrant-cenobite Wrote: Thanks dude, your partly responsible for her ending anyhow. I got the inspiration from your story, you know where the Dragon King wins, but I used that concept and edited it and gave it a twist but as I say, I have donw a few more bios and endings - 3 new character and 6 old characters, I'll post em' up soon!

LOL, thanks!

Oh! Post more please! And if you have one for Sonya fo it!!! Again, Great story man.

No problem Queve, I'll post up my other material later on today