How were the fights?! Keep the komments koming!!

the fights were mediocre but when is the next chapter coming?!?!?!?!

Next chapter should be tonight!! Keep the komments koming!!

Sweet I'm waiting for it.

Sweet I'm waiting for it.

Chapter 13: A King Vs. All that is Good
An Oni was roaring in rage as they swung their arms at Kung Lao and Johnny Cage. Another Oni was fighting Kitana, Cyrax and Jax. Frost’s location was unknown at this time. Everyone was fighting the two Oni at the same time, and both ended pretty quickly. Johnny distracted one of them, and Kung Lao started to finish this Oni off. While the creatures body was turned to Johnny, Lao took his hat off and threw it at the Oni’s head. It was a clean swipe, and one Oni was dead. The other fight had an Oni with Kitana on its leg. She was holding on to it so she wouldn’t get swung away. Jax jumped up and punched the Oni in the head. Cyrax took out one of his explosives and placed it on the Oni. Kitana jumped off of the leg and everyone ran away. BAM! The Oni exploded and all of the Oni were gone. Now it was just the Dragon King.

Dragon King Vs. Raiden

The Dragon King stood at about seven feet tall, which was as tall as Raiden. The Dragon King had horns all over his body, and was very muscular. He had fangs but still slightly resembled a human. Raiden threw his staff away and started the fight with a punch. The Dragon didn’t seem to feel it much, and he responded with a head butt. Raiden fell down and flipped his enemy to the ground. Raiden gave a quick stomp to the Dragon’s face. Raiden grabbed the king’s leg and snapped the bone in half. Then as he was going to do the same with the arm, the king blew fire at Raiden and burned him. Half of Raidens arm was now in bad shape, bus he still walked back over to the fallen king. Now the Dragon King stabbed Raiden with a horn on its leg. Raiden was now injected with venom and had to end this fight fast. The king started to get up slowly but there was an explosion from the Oni nearby. He fell back down to the ground from the explosion and Raiden limped closer to him. The king didn’t even notice that Raiden was there. Raiden grabbed the king’s head and ripped it off cleanly. That was it, and all was cured. Sonya arose from her condition moments later, and Raiden lost his venom he had gotten in the fight. Frost was still missing, and no one would here from her again. The Legion returned back to the Outworld and noticed that there was light shining in the palace. Raiden gave a small speech to the group before returning to the Earthrealm. Was this going to be the last time that Earth will be at harms way? No one knows for sure now. Johnny Cage worked on a movie “based” on this experience. Sonya quit the Special Forces for now, and Jax got promoted. Kung Lao was given a great welcome back from the monks, and currently lives around their area. Cyrax is now a complete human. He was paid a lot of money from the government for his ordeal and lives on a remote island. No one knows much of Kitana’s whereabouts either along with Frost. Frost should show up one day. Sub-Zero is still in charge of the Lin Kuei. As for Raiden, he is still disgusted at the Elder Gods and is keeping alert. He doesn’t sense any immediate danger though. So the Earth was saved yet again. Will the upcoming tournament be a fair one? Who will rule Outworld? Maybe these answers will be answered. Or aren’t supposed to answered. Earth shall prevail!

Well thats all i suppose. How was the ending?

Has anyone read the ending yet?

Well im done with writing for a few months. I cant Relply to you ImmortalSpectre for some reason so i'll respond here. Of course ive played Warcraft 3 and its AWESOME but i dont still have it. Im sorry im of no use. Has anyone read the end yet?

GEEEZZ Has anyone read the ending???!?!?! I need feedback!

BUMP!!!!

It was good, but kinda short, if i may presume. You'd expect more of a fight though, especially between gods. And why would Scorpion join the DK. I'll check right now. And anyways, Scorpion wouldn't care much if he killed Frost or not, their clans are enemies. And Frost wouldn't kill her master. he was just selfish and stubborn on MK:DA. I also wouldn've expected Kung Lao to fight the DK. Or possibly Scorpion, he could of killed him, feeling how he was the one risen by Quan Chi himself. So maybe some more detail,longer fights scenes and longer chapters and story all together possibley. But I'm not trying to invade your story, it was very good. I was blown away. Nice.

Okay, I noticed that Scorps joined the DK without explaniation. First he was good, then bad? Hmmm... Elusive fellow aint he.

the story is good i like it but near the end it seemed like u rushed it a little like u didnt want to write anymore. well the Story was great

To be honest with u Ninja, i was rushing towards the end. I wanted to end the story already because i was writing non stop for 3 months and had a lot of work in school. Keep the komments koming!!

Well, I can help with your story if you want. I've got lots of time. Not to mention, I'm the author of Mortal Kombat: Unholy Missions.
J/K

The ending sucked when all scorpian had to do was burn Quan Chi. Chi is tougher den dat. plus, the only reason why scorpian is ever in any of mortal kombat is because he seeks 4 revenge 4 his family and clan. Not to protect the Dragon King. Why would he any way. And wouldn't the team ask why he wanted to kill the dragon king? other than that, ur story was okay. I think u had trouble discribing the fight scenes any way, cuz it's hard to explain every little detail and do it in one sentence. i write stories and poems too, so i know how it was difficult. I'm pretty damn good at it too! but once u got started with the fights, u did good describing things. So good story dog! I enjoyed it even with my questions.

jjmonster2006 Wrote: The ending sucked when all scorpian had to do was burn Quan Chi. Chi is tougher den dat. plus, the only reason why scorpian is ever in any of mortal kombat is because he seeks 4 revenge 4 his family and clan. Not to protect the Dragon King. Why would he any way. And wouldn't the team ask why he wanted to kill the dragon king? other than that, ur story was okay. I think u had trouble discribing the fight scenes any way, cuz it's hard to explain every little detail and do it in one sentence. i write stories and poems too, so i know how it was difficult. I'm pretty damn good at it too! but once u got started with the fights, u did good describing things. So good story dog! I enjoyed it even with my questions.

Ok. What?

that's dawg to you. And for only having 28 visits, back down a bit and don't so angry over his ending. He was rushed because of school. And with your bragging about writing, what was your longest story? Try and beat 50 pages on the pc. Look for my story. Mortal Kombat: Unholy Missions.