Boraichus Special Stew
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01/06/2010 11:49 PM (UTC)by
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OrangatangKang
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WATAHHHHHHHHH!!!

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12/13/2009 04:11 AM (UTC)
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kingjolly
12/27/2009 03:04 AM (UTC)
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Spell check is your friend.
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MortalKombat2007
12/27/2009 04:42 AM (UTC)
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I stopped at "As the sun buried itself."

Also, please do not space out all your sentences next time.
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AngelOfTheFallen
12/27/2009 06:22 PM (UTC)
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^ What he said. You wondered why this didn't get posted earlier, seems pretty clear to me :\.
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Jerrod
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12/28/2009 05:28 AM (UTC)
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There are many problems with this story... Too many to name... Can't go into details now, but I'm sure other users will tell you before I get a chance.
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DrZoidberg
12/28/2009 09:07 AM (UTC)
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I couldn't understand any of that. I'm normally good at translating interwebz slang, but this goes beyond. I believe you created a new language and a new way to format stories. Read other user's stories on ideas to format your story before you create another.
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12/29/2009 02:13 AM (UTC)
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Mutha fuck(Tony Soprano impersonation) I typed the story into two paragraphs and it just fucking glitched into a fucking DIG DUG fucking story!confused
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Jiro
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12/29/2009 02:44 AM (UTC)
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It's spelled Bo' Rai Cho, and your dialogue seems borderline racist to me
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MortalKombat2007
12/30/2009 12:59 AM (UTC)
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OrangatangKang Wrote:
Mutha fuck(Tony Soprano impersonation) I typed the story into two paragraphs and it just fucking glitched into a fucking DIG DUG fucking story!confused


It is not a glitch. You probably hit enter to make a new line. Do not do that. Using the enter key in a word processor usually makes a new paragraph, not a new line of text. When your text runs at the end of the line, your word processor should automatically make a new line of text for you.
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Icebaby
12/30/2009 01:26 AM (UTC)
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Who is Boraichu?
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AngelOfTheFallen
12/30/2009 01:59 PM (UTC)
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I agree with MK2007, you must've hit the enter button at the end of the sentence. First thing they teach you in computer class in (I beleive it was eigth grade) that you type until you've reached the end of the paragraph, not the end of a sentence.
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12/30/2009 03:07 PM (UTC)
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Now to talk about the story... First off, spell character names. If you don't know how to spell them, look them up. It shows carelessness on your part when you can't spell Bo' Rai Cho right and he's a main character in your story.
Second, you've played MK4, MKD and MKA (at least I hope you have), and from that, should at least figure out that neither Liu nor Bo' Rai Cho speak with broken English. I'm sure you were trying to capture that they were both speaking a language that was foreign for them, but it has been revealed that both characters speak English well, so your story's not an accurate representation of either character.
Another random character change and random joke was with Raiden mentioning he takes Xanax. Okay, why would Raiden, a God, need meds for panic attacks? I'm all for random humour, but this part has no real background to be funny, and him popping up just like that and announcing he shouldn't be taking so much Xanax doesn't even work in this context.
And the last part is the stew... Blech. I'm sure you were emphasizing how disgusting Bo' can be, but everyone has limits; Bo' Rai Cho's nasty because he's a slob and a drunk. That doesn't mean he'll literally throw shit in his food to add flavour to it, much less give it to his star pupil.
You have many points to improve upon, so hopefully the next story you write will be 10x better than this.
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Icebaby
12/30/2009 05:39 PM (UTC)
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Also, I'm agreeing with Jin... I find this story to be somewhat racist when your characters are talking... As Asians do not speak like that.

(I should know since I'm friends with one back at my university, and she speaks perfect English.)
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LycaniLLusion
12/31/2009 01:42 PM (UTC)
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I agree with others about everything...also if you are trying to be funny using panic attacks and anxiety (meaning the use of xanax) as a joke...I don't find it funny at all. For some people it effects there everyday lives and they take it as serious as any other illness.
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01/01/2010 02:06 PM (UTC)
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Sorry if you found this racist but I was bored and couldnt keep Bo Rai Cho* off my mind....
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Zentile
01/02/2010 02:46 AM (UTC)
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I don't think the dialogue is racist because it's not like there's even a stereotype that asians talk like that.
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I need a new sig, something with Kabal from UMK3 would be sweet. Just imagine that here
01/02/2010 05:15 AM (UTC)
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You have alot of stuff to work on
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Geez, I've been a member since MKDA was just a pic of Scorpion and Jax looking at each other and I have less than 2,000 visits. I should really log in more...

01/06/2010 07:13 PM (UTC)
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They're talking like Jackie Chan.
I LOL'd.
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Jiro
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01/06/2010 11:49 PM (UTC)
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Zentile Wrote:
I don't think the dialogue is racist because it's not like there's even a stereotype that asians talk like that.

apparently the writer thinks there is a stereotype like that, or he wouldn't have written it like that
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