Lin Kuei Grandmaster Sub-Zero
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10/09/2008 02:16 AM (UTC)by
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Jerrod
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RyanRaiden
12/28/2006 04:30 AM (UTC)
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Awesome!! I will give you a 5/5. I love all of your works man, I will love to see your Bio's and other Submissions in the future.

-RyanRaiden.
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StreetKing
12/29/2006 04:22 PM (UTC)
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not bad. 4/5. the only problems were the whole fire thing which you said you'd explain, and how Sub-Zero forgave Frost so easily.
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12/29/2006 04:59 PM (UTC)
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StreetKing Wrote:
not bad. 4/5. the only problems were (...) how Sub-Zero forgave Frost so easily.

I never said he forgave her; she's still a member of the Lin Kuei, and to show that he's not a vengeful leader (the original Grandmaster would have killed any member who tried to take over the Lin Kuei), he's giving her the chance to earn back his respect and the respect of the other members. He's just showing her mercy; forgiveness is not implied in that.
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StreetKing
12/31/2006 11:42 PM (UTC)
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You're right. 5/5 from me then.
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UlcaTron
03/04/2007 03:25 AM (UTC)
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I really like this ; It has great detail. And Like Always, you did Great 10/10
I love how you make the fighting scenes.
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03/04/2007 03:37 AM (UTC)
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UlcaTron Wrote:
I really like this ; It has great detail. And Like Always, you did Great 10/10
I love how you make the fighting scenes.

Thanks, Im always afraid my fight scenes won't make sense, so I try to add as much detail as possible, and hope I don't make the fights too drawn out and boring.
Man, I didn't realise that it took me so much time between this fanfic and the Mavado one... I got to work on them more!
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UlcaTron
03/04/2007 03:41 AM (UTC)
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Jerrod Wrote:
UlcaTron Wrote:
I really like this ; It has great detail. And Like Always, you did Great 10/10
I love how you make the fighting scenes.

Thanks, Im always afraid my fight scenes won't make sense, so I try to add as much detail as possible, and hope I don't make the fights too drawn out and boring.
Man, I didn't realise that it took me so much time between this fanfic and the Mavado one... I got to work on them more!


Yeah, They Are Both Really Great
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subzeromaster23
02/02/2008 01:05 AM (UTC)
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jerrod, its time someone told you the truth. your stories blow. every single one of them just suck. until you become an artist and make a nice picture you will never hear from me again.








ps: you look like a sheman on your picture below your profile for the new years 2006 or whatever. or if that really was you, really looked more like a woman.
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Sub-Frost055
02/02/2008 01:11 AM (UTC)
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subzeromaster23 Wrote:
jerrod, its time someone told you the truth. your stories blow. every single one of them just suck. until you become an artist and make a nice picture you will never hear from me again.








ps: you look like a sheman on your picture below your profile for the new years 2006 or whatever. or if that really was you, really looked more like a woman.


Answer this, did you even read the story? What is a "Sheman," and are you ticked at him becuase he gave you skull points that you actually deserved?

Stop insulting a person who has every right to tell you what to do on this website, becuase not only he has the right to because he's a portal guard, but because you're an annoyance.

Seeing how he already bumped this, I will leave my comment as well as everyone else does when bumped stuff get bumped.

But to get back, I absoluetly adore this bio about Sub-Zero. Not because he's one of my favorite characters, but because you completely captured everything in this bio. You captured Sub-Zero perfectly, and I cannot say anything more.

You are a pure genius when it comes in making bios and stuff like that.

Two thumbs WAY up and a 5+ out of 5

CHEERS!grin
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scorpion32
02/02/2008 01:42 AM (UTC)
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i can't believe you don't know what a sheman is. LOLgrintongue
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scorpion32
02/02/2008 01:43 AM (UTC)
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it's a man and a girl, like youtongue
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Jerrod
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02/04/2008 12:17 AM (UTC)
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subzeromaster23 Wrote:
jerrod, its time someone told you the truth. your stories blow. every single one of them just suck. until you become an artist and make a nice picture you will never hear from me again.
ps: you look like a sheman on your picture below your profile for the new years 2006 or whatever. or if that really was you, really looked more like a woman.

There's another reason I will never hear from you again; you see, I think I've been too nice to you, letting you off with only basic warnings when it came to the spam you've been creating, and the apparent trolling that's been going on. Now, considering you've been causing nothing but trouble since you joined MKO, I see no reason that you should be here anymore. You have been banned.
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it's a man and a girl, like youtongue

The warning I sent to you stated the following...
Jerrod Wrote:
It seems that you've been sending harassing messages on the board; stop it now. If you keep this up, you'll be temporarily banned and lose your posting privileges.

Obviously, calling a user a "sheman" counts as harassment, so you'll lose your posting privileges for two weeks; see you again February 17th!
Now to respond to a useful comment.
Sub-Frost055 Wrote:
I absoluetly adore this bio about Sub-Zero. Not because he's one of my favorite characters, but because you completely captured everything in this bio. You captured Sub-Zero perfectly, and I cannot say anything more.
You are a pure genius when it comes in making bios and stuff like that.
Two thumbs WAY up and a 5+ out of 5
CHEERS!grin

Thank you very much for the kind words, I wish I had more time to write these, but with school and life getting in the way, it's not easy (heck, I've been working on the next one for at least six months). I hope to have the next one done by the end of the month, but we'll see how much time I can devote to it. Thanks again for the comments, I appreciate it.
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02/19/2008 08:23 PM (UTC)
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I DONT GET IT!confused
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02/20/2008 04:06 AM (UTC)
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jimmyd55 Wrote:
I DONT GET IT!confused


Jerrod wrote his own fanfiction of Sub-Zero.

5/5 btw
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02/20/2008 06:10 PM (UTC)
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I DONT GET IT!confused

It's a fanfiction that's part of a series I am writing, what more do you need to get?
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02/21/2008 04:40 AM (UTC)
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Wow!!!wow

This is very good and creative. I love your own twist on the story as well as keeping true to the theme of mortal kombat and the characters. I didn't know you were this outstanding at writing did you take classes or something. I really look forward to seeing some more of your story, this is really good.

5/5

p.s. ever think about putting this stuff on fanfiction.net? You would get some respondes from them too.
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02/22/2008 05:39 PM (UTC)
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Irine4 Wrote:
Wow!!!wow
This is very good and creative. I love your own twist on the story as well as keeping true to the theme of mortal kombat and the characters. I didn't know you were this outstanding at writing did you take classes or something. I really look forward to seeing some more of your story, this is really good.
5/5
p.s. ever think about putting this stuff on fanfiction.net? You would get some respondes from them too.

Thanks for the response. I never took any writing classes, but I used to read a lot of fiction novels, and I've basically memorized the entire plot of MK and with what I don't know, I make sure to look up.
In all honesty, I've never considered putting this stuff on any other site, simply because I wanted this to be MKO-exclusive, and because I was afraid my stories would be stolen, but considering how long it's been since I've finished the last one, and since I'm still working on one now, I should consider branching out with it.
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invadera-26
05/31/2008 05:39 AM (UTC)
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Got one for Ermac?
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05/31/2008 04:15 PM (UTC)
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invadera-26 Wrote:
Got one for Ermac?

I'm still trying to figure out a way to work him into the story
Spoilers: (Highlight to reveal)
but I won't be making a biography for him because I already have my other bios planned out to play off of each other, and the story arch is complicated enough with what I already have to add someone else I hadn't planned on writing about (I did that with Shinnok, Shang Tsung, Meat, and Jade already, and I'm having trouble making cool and significant endings for them). He will be mentioned though, as I enjoy putting blurbs of minor characters in the story to let everyone know that I haven't forgotten them.

Still working on the next one though, I haven't forgotten this series, and I still want to finish it.
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invadera-26
06/01/2008 02:01 AM (UTC)
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LIAR!!! You just dont want to make one for Ermac because you cant handle him speaking as a group! (joking) By the way: Has someone done one for Ermac? I might do one for him.
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queve
07/04/2008 05:58 AM (UTC)
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Now this is what I call real Fan Fiction.

I enjoyed reading the Sareena info. It was a nice touch to have her involved and it was actually quite sad to see her realize that the Subby she was hugging wasn’t who she thought he was.

So, Shang Tsung got killed? Poor guy, I love him, but yeah, he disserves to rest in peace.

I LOVED the way Sub-Zero treated Frost because of her treachery. It would had been an excellent twist to see her rule the power of the medallion though, but this was still quite fun. I wonder if she will ever earn the respect she lost?

LOL! Sareena scaring the young Lin Kuei was fun to read as well, I have a feeling she could had enjoyed the effect of her presence and dark stories, despite being very real and very cruel.

“I addressed her personally and told her to be very careful. She seemed to be particularly happy about it...”

LMAO!!! That’s got to be one of my favorite parts of the fic. Poor Frost, she really did screw things up. I picture her looking so sweet in that part of the story that I had to laugh.

One thing I found kind of out of character for Subby was his “war movie to horror film” quotes, it isn’t really a big deal, but I kind of found it silly coming from a character like him. I could buy it from Johnny and even Cyrax (movie references in MKDA), but not Subby.

I had forgotten to mention I also enjoyed the Oni and Mummies cybernetic fusion. Kind of cool actually.

So what happened to poor Sareena and Frost? Im curious to know if he really did see her, and if she has gone back to Quan Chi for whatever reason. Maybe her demonic side got out of her again.

As for Frost...Im sure the bitch will go and side with the Tekunin or something, but that but you wrote about him inspiring other people to change, Im guessing that’s going to make her do something nice for a change.

I guess I’ll have to wait and see in the next bio.

Awesome work Jerrod!

Btw, why does your Mavado fan fic say “Author: Maria”? I forgot to ask you about that.
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07/04/2008 05:04 PM (UTC)
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queve Wrote:
So what happened to poor Sareena and Frost? Im curious to know if he really did see her, and if she has gone back to Quan Chi for whatever reason. Maybe her demonic side got out of her again.
As for Frost...Im sure the bitch will go and side with the Tekunin or something, but that but you wrote about him inspiring other people to change, Im guessing that’s going to make her do something nice for a change.
Btw, why does your Mavado fan fic say “Author: Maria”? I forgot to ask you about that.

Thanks for the comments, I appreciate them as always.
Sareena and Frost will get their own bios, so you'll be able to read it first hand once they get done.
As for the Maria bit, it's because I don't have my own personal computer, I use my mother's, so all documents are automatically saved under her name (Maria) unless I remember to change the settings before I submit them. The less time I spend working on a bio, the less likely I am to remember to change that name, so it's possible that 3 or 4 of my submitted works are under my mom's name.
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queve
07/15/2008 06:28 AM (UTC)
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Cool! I cant wait to read Frosts and Sareena's. Im actually quite interested because Subbys bio left me with some interesting doubts.

Hopefully Frost learned from her mistakes and behaves this time around.
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10/08/2008 02:02 PM (UTC)
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5/5 good job man.
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