Poor little ScorpionMKSM, no one helps.
wait a mintue, thats lie.
Zentile Wrote:Pink_Ranger Wrote:
Being tough is one thing, lowering yourself to reply at his level is completely different. That is why you were skulled, and that is why I wish you'd respond differently. If he wants to make an ass out of himself, then let him deal with the reprocutions.
It WAS a pretty funny comeback, though.
Anyway, as for the comic... It's a Thanksgiving Special alright... SPECIAL CRAP. haha.
Seriously though,it blew my mind away by how bad it is. Ok, last chance kid. I'll explain to you why it's garbage, instead of just saying that it's garbage.
(This applies for both parts of Rayden and Friends Thanksgiving Special - Halloween Havoc)
I can't see how you could've created such a horrible comic structure. You have three panels vertically, then next to them, two large horizontal panels, divided into several other smaller, tiny panels. How can you expect us to read these and not feel like someone threw a rock at our head? So that's issue number one. My suggestion, and the obvious cure: Don't make such fucking stupid panel distributions. It's like you're a fucking moron, I don't care how young you are, I KNOW you've read enough comics to realize that this:
http://www.freewebs.com/animemk/panelshit.GIF is impossible to comprehend.
Instead of doing a billion different panels for just one comic, remember that one comic should have ONE big joke, one point, one story.
You dont have to write a ton of dialogue and use as many characters as you can get your hands on, just do something simple like this:
http://www.freewebs.com/animemk/subzeroandlaofuny.JPG Obviously that's not a real comic, it's just something to help you understand how you should structure a story.
Now the quality of the picture and text is just... abysmal. The text is hard to read because it's obviously been resized or is being written with a weird font on too small a size, the speech bubbles are nothing but completely white shapes, when that should not be the case, ever. Look at ANY decent comic, you'll see that it should have a proper shape, with outlining, and the text should be placed in the centre of it, not in a corner of a huge white circle.
Don't make the Narrator's speech the exact same crap as the characters' speech bubbles! How the fuck are we supposed to know? Remember, you have to explain everything to us visually, because we have no clue what's going on in your mind.
Don't make shit by yourself if all you have is Paint. That painting or whatever it is that Kano's statue is holding (what the...!?) looks terrible. Look at Scorpion's sprite: How many yellows do you see on his outfit? You can't have a frame that only has ONE BROWN.
The couches and trees look so fucking terrible, like you took a picture of something, saved it as a jpeg, then resized it over and over again.
Also, it took me a while but I finally understood that the tree ends up falling on Rayden. HOW ARE WE SUPPOSED TO KNOW THAT, if all that happens is you see Rayden near it, and then the tree down and no Rayden at all? Use sounds. Write shit, like ''*tree falling down* '' (Dont use that stupid thing , I hate it and it's not funny, but it's still alot better than not writing anything at all), or ''BAMF'' or ''RAAWR'' for situations where there should be a sound to help us understand what's happening.
Ok, so that's as far as comic making and visual stuff goes. Now onto the creative process.
COMICS HAVE TO MAKE SENSE. There has to be a story that makes sense, no matter how bizarre or silly or funny it is, it has to MAKE SENSE. Explain it to us, so it will make sense. Why the fuck are Rayden and Scorpion in an island for the holidays, and Rayden's bossing Scorpion around? Why are Sub-Zero and Kano playing football? Why is football called football, if you use the hands alot more, and football is actually the name of what you americans call soccer?
Why the FUCK did you even mention Goro? Why are Sub-Zero and Kano in the comic? It's just ONE comic, why the fuck are there a thousand ''jokes'' in the same thing? Some of those jokes actually have potential to be funny, but the thing is such a big mess, that it's not funny, it's just hard to look at.
Also, for God's sake, NO COMIC ''ARTIST'' has the privelage of being allowed to make typos. YOU MAKE THE COMIC. YOU RE-READ IT. YOU RE-READ IT AGAIN. How on EARTH can you write LUI KANG!? It's a good thing Shao Kahn wasn't in your comic, because I'm sure you would've written Shao Khan. NO mistakes. You cant make any mistakes. After you finish the comic, re read it. I know it's painful to read your comics, but try, please, and you'll see they'll become better if you fix the mistakes.
There's more to it in terms of creative structure for the jokes, but before you go into that, just fix the stuff I talked about above.
Now that you've finished reading my post, re read it, so you'll remember, and go try to make another comic. If you want, just remake the crappy ones you've already made, but fixing the mistakes. That's a good exercise to get better.
Also, read ]{OMBAT's tutorial:
http://www.mortalkombatonline.com/content/forum/showmessage.cds?id=5922&page;=1 It's stupid proof, anyone can read it, understand it, comprehend it, and use it.
If your next comic sucks ass, even after all this help, you WILL get flamed, boy.
