Asmodeus: The One Lord - Prolouge
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Asmodeus: The One Lord - Prolouge
04/01/2009 07:59 PM EST
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RE: Fan Submission: Asmodeus: The One Lord - Prolouge
05/01/2009 10:02 PM EST
Almost pushed off the page and still no feed back...what's the deal?

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RE: Fan Submission: Asmodeus: The One Lord - Prolouge
05/02/2009 12:38 AM EST
Not everyone reads the fan fictions, since they tend to be really long and people are more for the instant gratification that pictures have to offer. This suffers from the fact that it's too short though.
I like what you have so far, as your style is pretty detailed, but it's hard for me to give it more feedback than that because there's very little for me to rate. It's a nice concept for a story, but for a prologue, there's really not enough for it to have stood alone and it may as well have been the introduction paragraphs to the first part of the series that will follow. You seem to be on the right track with it, just need more meat on the bones.
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RE: Fan Submission: Asmodeus: The One Lord - Prolouge
05/03/2009 01:19 AM EST
I liked it alot because it was shorter. It looks like a pretty good start for more to come.

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