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Scorpions Chamber Trial
07/13/2007 07:05 PM EST
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
07/14/2007 07:46 AM EST
This isn't too bad 5animals. However, I am confused as to why Scorpion thinks the Lin Kuei must pay, when he knows it was all Quan Chi. Although, Scorpion is a hard character to write, with the retcon and all.

What is the setting in this passage? After MKA?

I like your writing style, really nice.

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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
07/14/2007 02:22 PM EST
Thank you raisin cain for both the compliments and criticism. You are correct, I should have elaborated a little more on what the setting was. Basicaly I was just trying to put my spin on what Scorpion's thoughts were between the time of his exile in the Nether Realm and when he realized that Quan Chi was his true enemy. (Mk2-4ish) I suppose I worte it a little two quickly (30 minutes or so) and to be honest I don't know enough about the canon story behind the two. I really only know them from the games, not from any books or comics. I was just trying to make up my own version of what it would have been like. It wasn't meant to follow the canon events so much. As I said it was a bit of practice for me really. I just wanted to see if my style of thought and writing would be well received.

Edit: Blarg I just noticed a couple of grammar errors too :-/
-Were it not for his innate abilities, intense training {,} and trusty spear, and demonic powers the fallen {ninja} would likely not have been able to cross such a hellish rift himself.-
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
07/14/2007 07:09 PM EST
5animals Wrote:
Thank you raisin cain for both the compliments and criticism. You are correct, I should have elaborated a little more on what the setting was. Basicaly I was just trying to put my spin on what Scorpion's thoughts were between the time of his exile in the Nether Realm and when he realized that Quan Chi was his true enemy. (Mk2-4ish) I suppose I worte it a little two quickly (30 minutes or so) and to be honest I don't know enough about the canon story behind the two. I really only know them from the games, not from any books or comics. I was just trying to make up my own version of what it would have been like. It wasn't meant to follow the canon events so much. As I said it was a bit of practice for me really. I just wanted to see if my style of thought and writing would be well received.


Edit: Blarg I just noticed a couple of grammar errors too :-/

-Were it not for his innate abilities, intense training {,} and trusty spear, and demonic powers the fallen {ninja} would likely not have been able to cross such a hellish rift himself.-


Sure thing. But, I see your point of perspective on the passage. It's unique now that I see. You got good writing style, and if this is only practice, then it's still pretty good with small grammar errors which isn't a big deal. But, I'm also glad that you want to take a new direction with Scorpion, for his story now is overused and bleak.

Btw, I like your username, it's different, lol. wink
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
08/24/2007 05:08 PM EST
that was nice even tho a bit of mistacks its great!!!!! 3624642/5 lol actually 5/5grin
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
08/26/2007 01:10 PM EST
Nice yob, 5animals. We need more people to write stuff like this for Scorpion.
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
08/30/2007 10:11 PM EST
scorpion thinks the lin kuei must pay because it was them who originally killed his clan, it was one of the sub zeros who killed originally.
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
08/30/2007 10:14 PM EST
How the FUCK do you write like this? lol!
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
08/30/2007 10:15 PM EST
That was a tight story. I believe it happens around the end of mk2? As the ending for scorpion states in mk2 that he was to be sworn to protect sub zero. Good job dude.
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
08/30/2007 10:25 PM EST
Nice 5, I could "see it".
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
09/22/2007 03:06 PM EST
please,oh please write more!ill be happy if you do. please!!!!!!!!!!!grin
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
03/06/2009 10:03 AM EST
Excelent! 5/5!
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
03/28/2009 06:14 PM EST
That was fantastic man!! coming from person myself who does martial arts.grin
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
09/05/2009 11:42 PM EST
This Was Really Great To Read If You Made This A Full Book I Would Buy Itsmile
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
04/28/2011 06:33 PM EST
you should make a pictrue
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
04/28/2011 09:44 PM EST
Blakesanders2 Wrote:
you should make a pictrue
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Wow this was like two years ago. But I'm glad it was brought back up its a great read. If this is closed can somebody tell me if he has any more? Promise not to comment on them.
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RE: Fan Submission: Scorpions Chamber Trial
05/01/2011 05:46 PM EST
Sounds pretty cool. I could see it done in a graphic novel

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