Waddup,

Just wanted to stop by and leave a quick message saying how happy I am to see all these posts so full of relevancy to the story! There's nothing better than stopping by the thread once in a while to be pleasently surprised with all the new ideas and topics being brought up, driving not only our story forward, but also this community we've formed as well!

Thanks a bunch!

- Leo

And EM -_- '.... I know games sometimes suck us in, but... It's been, like, months... and even if you WERE under some heavy spell, ya could've stopped by once in a while to keep up-to-date, since that's a matter of, like, 10 minutes... good to see you're participating so much already, tho.

Anyway, are you all caught up with the episodes?

LOL Nothing in command, that cracked me up. Hmm, why would Bianca go crazy without Serpy? Its not like she would absoutlly die without him, though she would be like a Beast without a Cage if he's away...who knows what she would do! Its actually good to see you come back EM, though I wish you would have at least checked in everyonce in a while, at least your making an effort to make up for it.



That is a very interesting thought about the Millena victory SQ, though your little comment was what I was mainly looking at. Though it doesn't bother me that much comming from an imbecile like you, meh, your not worth it. At least D_W was worth my time, you...Ha!




Also just to let you guys know, you all can make posts of disscussion as well. I was just trying to make an effort to keep this thread active and alive. So far you all are doing a great job, so lets keep it going!

Yeah I noticed that as well, I suppose I started a Fad as well.




LMFAO...o_o

Just out of curiosity, where did you having a sexual obsession with Cinderella and stories of injured puppies come from in this disscussion?



I agree fullheartedly. Its Great to see such great posts and continuing disscussions! Hopefully we can keep this up in the future episodes to come! Just a quick in and out...I shall return from Vacation on Saturday!


- 2nd in Command

Hm...Cinderella stories without Cinderella and abused animals? Me thinks you've got the wrong genre here, Ermac


I do get what you're saying though....it would appear that Mileena ('Cinderella') would be having a rough time, much like 'ol Cindy had a rough life at the beginning, but, later gains the upper hand (though hopefully without the assistance of any fairies....).

She will be 'backed into a corner' like a 'rabid animal' and therefore become ferocious, and defeat the pompous Viper.

At least, that's the best I could make out your analogy.

Great reply though, and I agree; I like seeing long drawn out fights as well, I think the longest one we've seen would be a tie between Mace vs. Maverick and Elandra vs. Bianca; both were very entertaining and suspenseful.

Lol, thank you for the interpretation. I see where he's getting at now, and it does make sense, though its still a bit random to use those examples, imo



Leo in my opinion has an amazing gift when it comes to writing the episodes, but the battles by far are very impressive. I wouldn't call them "Drawn Out", I find that term neagtive. I think of them as Long, Impressive, eventful, and fast paced!

Every Battle in the Past Episodes starting with Hamon v.s. Awren and Lara v.s. Bianca, all the way up until this point have all been fresh and never stale. Like for example, having the Bianca/Elandra Brawl in Bitch-Tree Forest added so much to the overall battle dynamics and scene! I really can't wait to find out what he has instore for the future!

B_C Alright, you win, stop the violence.

To whoever doubts Leo's fighting skills. I've been reading Leo's work since the endings thread (That's right, I loved them). If you ever want to read intense fight scenes, read that thread (Especially Sheeva vs. Motaro). But back on topic, Leo's been writing great scenes, whether it's Lara vs. Bianca, Elandra vs. Bianca, Mace vs. Maverick, they've all been specatular. So when this next episode comes out, watching Millena vs. Viper is gonna be the best I've seen from Leo (Unless you want to go back to that old thread). Can't wait for it.

Now B_C, don't go interpreting what I say in a manner that it wasn't intended

I said that I enjoy drawn out fights, which also means: long, fulfilling, impressive, and/or enjoyable.

You may have not meant it, but you also kind of implied that my remark was meant to say that I didn't think the battles were fresh or exciting, when the exact opposite is true.

You are right, Leo has done a splendid job, and I've enjoyed every scene so far, whether it's dialogue or combat; I simply prefer longer battles because it allows the audience to see more of what a character is capable of.

And you and Ermac are welcome for my interpretation of his animal-abuse -cinderella fixation, though like B_C, it was a rather odd example, lol.

I just wanted to make sure that my comments were understood fully, because while I don't mind people thinking about what I've said in different terms than I've actually used, I don't what my words to be taken out of context.

At any rate, I am eagerly awaiting the next episode, and it's been great seeing so many postive responses; I think this is the most active we've been in awhile!

^_^ Glad you have come to your senses, Welcome Back. I do apologize for comparing you to D_W, your not a quiter nor a loser. I am a bit rash at times, but really don't let it bother you, I'm all bark, no Bite. (Unless I know where you Live...o_o)

I agree with you Completely. Leo's endings kicked major ass, and that same quality improved over the time period, transitioning into the Beautiful episodes!

(I still thought it was awsome when Sonya kicked Frost's ass so bad it put her in a COMA! >= O , Also Mileena's ending was Orgasmic!)




Umm...Duh...Err....hmm...Oh Um -_-'...yeahh...Umm...Where did the Cows come from? o_o



Wow you took that the wrong way...Whoops.

I was actually agreeing with you, stating that the Episode's fights were outstanding, But I just made a point that I didn't like the term "drawn out", especially when SK used that term to describe my reviews in a not so good way. Then I was just adding the extra mile with small nice comments that make Leo warm up inside such as:

"Leo in my opinion has an amazing gift when it comes to writing the episodes..."

All I was doing was agreeing with you, just building upon what you said...Sorry you took it the wrong way. Such Confusion makes my head spin.

Yes we haven't been so active in a long time...So lets keep it this way Shall we?

...Or Else... >XO!!!!!!

Your's Truly,

- 2nd in Command

Lol...sorry, I guess I did take it the wrong way.....we'll just chock it up to lack of sleep Thanks for agreeing with me then!

I've seen some very good point of views so far about the upcoming fight, which are inspiring to say the least. This is one of the best things about having such an active thread: new ideas pop up out of nowhere, and everyone can sort of contribute to the upcoming episodes without even realizing it.

I hope we can keep this momentum going........ Forever... O_O....



Thank you, B_C, though I shall now sue you for using one of my trademark words/innuendo-filled definition of one of my trademark words. Next time you use "Orgasmic" or anything of the like as an adjective, I better see a citation with my orgasmic name next to it.

Same goes for everyone else! XO!!! Beware a lawyer.

Thank you to all, again! ^_^

P.S.: Still don't get it about the Cinderella capybaras and cow villains...

Oh Leo, so I don't get any recognition for bringing up the topic of your orgasmic (Circa Leo) endings. Anyway, can't wait to read next epi.

B_C, happy the violence is over. Now we can get on to happier things, like blood and gore.

To everybody else concerning cinderella and abused puppies. O_o

^_^! I hereby recognize StreetKing as the Orgasmic-Endings-Topic-Bringer-Upper.

Now, for the latest episode!


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Deadly Dominion: Episode 15
"Crimson Everglades"

"As Lord Vladimir's master plot goes forward smoothly, Davila's own intentions continue to be put into action by the demonic bride... with obvious, apparantly-impenetrable obstacles still in her way.

Meanwhile, everyone prepares to gather at the Dimentian Everglades for the first fight of the tournament between the beast Viper and the Heiligian royalty, Millena."

And also, I'm happy to introduce you guys with some "Bonus Content" for this episode, including:

Leona's Portrait

Elandra Sketch

Viper Sketch


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Can't wait to hear the reviews for this episode, what you guys thought about the Bonuses, and what kind of discussions are gonna be brought up! Let's keep up the momentum, like I said before... Forever... O_O!

Peace,

- Leo

What another Outstanding Episode Leo!

* A Very Dramatic Scene this one. I love how it explores Zale's relationship and bond with his Brother Vincente, which is very good to do storywise with Minor Characters, helps flesh them out and make them unique. It also shows more of Millena's compassion and good nature in this scene was well, as she is comforting Zale about his Brother Vanishing in thin air.

I wonder what she's thinking now that she knows someone is hiding, waiting, stalking her and her brother in this already unpredictable and evil realm, just waiting to pounce like an animal on its prey. Does she think of this threat as minor? Or is she thinking of the dangers of this Creature? Anyway, a Great, Deep Diaolouge Scene!

* A Very Creepy, Spine Tingling scene. Gas Chamber, a nice touch to Viro's Lair indeed. This quote makes me "LMFAOOOOOOO!" when I read it. Just an inside joke between me and Leo:

"Get me out of here, you FREAK! Get me out so I can slice you in half!"

I wonder if the Gas Killed him, or was he just GASSED >XO! I thought it was prettty creepy, like a scene from a horror movie, with Viro just staring at Vincente from behind the Glass. This is one of my favorite lines, from this Awsome Sinister scene:

"Who's the locked up vermin now, Heiligian scum?"

* Another Dramatic scene, but this time on the Villian's part. Viper is all ready for battle in new kick ass armor, which is not to big to review on, but I like it when a character changes clothing ^_^ (LMFAO that was for humor but it turned out just horrible, so forget that ever happened.)

Vice keeping this information to himself to gain an upper hand against Lara is not a bad idea at all. Lara can make threats til her face turns blue, but right now, she needs that information and to keep Vice under her control for the time being. So for now, Vice has the Ace, but I have a feeling he won't have it for long.

"You're playing with fire, animal! And it'll burn you alive and into a crisp!"

Another Great, intense scene!

* This whole Davila/Maverick Relationship seems trickey indeed and is very crucial for her plans. Several Threats stand her way majorly:

1.) Lord Vladimir- Oh Course if He finds Out, she's screwed beyond measure.

2.) Hamon- Would he rat her out to Lord Vlad? Or could she bribe him with power? Where do his allegiances Lie?

3.) Bianca- She has a concrete relationship with Maverick Already, what will happen once she see's a third wheel that directly screws with her plans?

Hmm, already requesting into Luther's ranks? He just did the same for Bianca recently, and Hamon just joined as well, what will Luther think of doing it again? Perhaps make it a lot harder to join the the Deadliest Ranks in the Universe? Who knows, we'll just wait and see.

The scene begins to get intimate, and just as the audiemce holds their breaths, awaiting what happens next, Our favorite Dancer interrupts with the funniest random quote I have ever read:

"BIANCA (O.S.)
Hurry up, Serpen Kia! You're a monster, who cares if you go naked?"

I literally fell out of my computer chair laughing at the sheer randomness and Comedy of the Quote. But just to let you know, Serpen Kiais very vain about his personal appearance, and always strides to look his best, no matter the situation. It may take 4 Hours for Bianca to do her hair every morning, but it takes Serpy about 6-8 to apply all of those bandages.

Anyway back to the scene. I wonder what Davila is thinking about when she's looking at the book covers:

"Dimentian Architecture"... "Red Blade: A Compilation of Complex Armament"... "The Limits of Necromancy and Beyond"...

She can build a House? Learn some Military Tactics? Raise some Zombie slaves? So Many possibilities...o_o.

The way Lord Vladimir appeared in the Fire was visually amazing in my mind thanks to the imagery in your words, very mysitcal and frightening. Quite a cliff-hanger, I cannot wait to see the outcome!

"We need to talk, honey..."

Well here we are, the 1st Battle of the Tournament! I love how you described the Everglades through the eyes of a bird flying overhead, very unique and well done. Nice pep-talk between Logan and Millena, it really shows their strong Brother and Sister bond. This scene also shows the relationship between the Dimentians. Luther and Lara only care about winning the Adonis Stone and the Tournament, while Bianca and Serpen Kia actually care about Viper.(But make no mistake, they want the Adonis Stone just as much as the Others do.)

"Bianca gives him a short kiss on the cheek. She and Serpen Kia leave the scene"

Awww ^_^ So Sweet.

I agree with Lara on this one, Taranis is a bit biased. >= (

"On one side we have the enchanting combatant of royal Heiligian blood... and on the other, the vicious spawn from Dimentia."

I just hope he doesn't go on the Bianca/Elandra battle:

" On one side we have the lovely guide of Earth...and on the other, the Whore of Dimentia."

>= O...Beware the Crabs. (LMFAO another random joke that made no sense whatsoever, please disreguard.)

Okay onto the Fight! I went back to Episode 2, just to See the Picture of Millena's weapon, which is definately one of the more beautiful ones in the series. Viper reminds me of the Predator in this scene, with the whole cloaking in the Jungle thing I suppose, Lands quite a few good hits and scratches. I also love Viper's re-tractable claws, reminds me of Lady Deathstrike from X-men2.

"Like a bat, it smashes into Viper's neck, his body reappearing as it is sent racing past foliage and finally dropping into a lake of cloudy water. "

Owch, well I guess he deserved that for sneak attacking too much .

"While a few of the Dimentians present roll their eyes or completely disregard Logan's words, Bianca sends him a curious glance."
^_^

"Afraid to get a little dirty?"
Millena casts a disgusted expression upon him and leaps into the lake courageously.

Rejection! X_X

As Millena is stuck in Quicksand, Viper goes all Creature from the Black lagoon and starts swimming in the lake, ready to attack from the murky waters. This is one of my favorite attacks from Millena:

"She raises the Supernal Spear high into the air, where it summons a dazzling golden glow around itself. She then brings the Spear down onto the surface of the water and cuts through it, outlining a semi circle.
The Spear leaves a luminous streak within the waters. Viper rushes toward it without fear. Nothing can stop him... until he comes within five feet of it. He is met with an explosion of blinding light that knocks him and a large amount of the water encircling it back a large distance. "

That is so Awsome! ^_^. Its good to see a brief cameo of Mace and Elandra, both showing concern and hope for Millena's victory. Some cool water aquabatics (Is that a word? It is now! >= O) and intense struggle.

A Great Quote by Viper here:

"Close your eyes and give into your weakness! You'll die before I let you reach the surface!"

ZOMG...is it....No It can't be...it IS....O_O!

"He laughs energetically, brimming with intimidation... but stops when he feels a presence behind him.

Viper turns around, puzzled. He is met with THE GAPING, GARGANTUAN JAWS OF A COLOSSAL REPTILE, ITS ENDLESS FANGS READY TO CHOMP DOWN ON FRESH MEAT."

GUSTAVE! :-O Here's some background information about him I created, Leo can decide to make it Canon or not, but I did it for fun:

Dimentian Crocodylidae- A native species of Dimentia, this aquatic reptile-like creature is mainly found in the tropic regions of the realm. They are carnivores, and mainly prey off of unsuspecting fishermen or any foolish person whom would roam their territory. It is said that they are the ancestors of the "Crocodile" of Earth. One whom roams the Dimentian Everglades is known as "Gustave" by the natives, being named after a Great Dimentian General whom legend says wresltled one by himself, killed it, and used its Hide as Battle Armor. Though it appears that he is slain by Viper in the 1st Battle of the Tournament, it is known that Gustave has an unnatural way of cheating death...

Yay Millena made it out of the Bloody Lake! Very Great Cliffhanger, and I cannot wait to see the outcome of the fight!

"Getting feisty, are we? Time to put you down for good..."

Another Amazing Episode Leo, and I cannot wait for the Outcome in Episode 16!!!

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Onto Bonus Content Mini-Review:

First off, the Leona Portrait is Amazing! I love the actress whom inspired her, and I love how you can see her weapon in the Dark Moon behind her! The Effects and Font Go So Nicely with the Pic as well...I can hardly describe it! Hopefull you'll make more with other characters...Like...*cough* Bianca *cough*

The Elandra and Viper sketches are also very amazing. I love how it shows Viper's Claws Growing Larger and the evil look he is giving is amazing. Elandra is also very Good with the Sai in the background, and her facial expression is outstanding.

I loved the Bonus content and can't wait to see more in the Future!

Where the Hell is everyone? The Episode has been up for a few days now, and no one has posted their reviews! Come on Back and let's keep this momentum going....Forever...O_O!

I would also Like to ask you guys your opinion about advertisement.

How do you think we should Advertise our thread, to attract more of an Audience?

Can't wait to hear some ideas! Thanks in advance!


- 2nd in Command Biotches!

Wow Leo awesome just awesome. B_C told me to leave a big post so here you go.


EPISODE 15:

This scene was brilliant. Really would get your adrenaline pumping if this were a game or a flick. But that will have to wait. Anyway this was near perfect.
STORY: The story of EP: 15 couldnt have come at a more perfect time. It was about time that there was actually a set fight. And what better combatants than Mileena and Viper. The episode was good at expressing some of the relationships between the characters. THe most notable of which being Zale and Vincentte. This really showed how much Zale is upset about the loss of Vincette. Another was the Bianca/Serpen Kia relationship with Viper. The comrades actually seem supportive of each other which is good. Cause it would suck if your combatants hated each other.
DIALOGUE: The dialouge in this scene was brilliant. There were some quotes that were hillarious. Like B_C said the quote "Hurry up Serpen Kia your a monster who cares if you go naked." That was the perfect quote to laugh at a serious scene. There was one quote however that I didnt know whether to laugh or say to myself "Dat biatch is screwed." That was the quote when Vladamir said to Davila Maestros. "We need to talk honey." THe honey part was funny and serious at the same time which was awesome.
ACTION: This was definitely the most action packed scene yet. The scene between Viro and Vincentte was excellent (Your making me run out of adjectives Leo ) The gas chamber was chilling. It is the stuff of horror films. Finally the fight scene between Viper and Mileena is for lack of another adjective adrenaline pumping. The suspence that the reader is in when Viper goes camoflage is....astounding. And it was a really great idea to describe the sounds and the setting.
SETTING: Speeking of the Dimentian Everglades were exactly what it should be. The whole marshy grassy deal.

So in conclusion

STORY- 10
DIALOUGE- 9
ACTION- 10
SETTING- 9.5

Ups- Takes away vocabulary in an instant
Really gets your blood flowing
Downs- Sheya right
?- Would it really be that quiet in a fight like this?

FINAL SCORE- 9.3


LEONA'S PORTRAIT- I cant review this because the link didnt work for me. Dont know why.

ELANDRA scetch- Now that i can reuse some previous adjectives the scetch was excellent. The only thing that might be kind of odd about it is that she has some huge ass lips 9.5/10

VIPER scetch- That is what i call a drawing. The drawing is easy to visualize when you are making the story and the drawing of his eye to the side is a nice touch 10/10


OVERALL LEO POST SCORE: 9.6/10

Top notch Leo top notch.

EM: Still nothing in command (but B_C if your willing to give me the title of "EM something in command" that would be awesome.

If you keep these long Review posts up EM, we "might" give you the title of "Head of Janitorial Services".

Also since you called Bianca a "Biatch" and only gave Leo and 9.6/10, you forced me to post this:



(See Leo, I did find a way to use my Quote )

Janitor. Youre too kind. But it wasnt Bianca i called a biatch it was Davila. and since when is 9.6 bad. Do da math yo. Its .4 away from a 10 which is perfect.

EM (Head of Janitorial services. for now)

Oh Okay ^_^ You evaded one of my Stabs...

Anyway, Leo deserves nothing but Perfection, nothing Less. All who see otherwise will be...well I'll leave that up to Leo.

(Please Let me Stab them Leo! Please!)

- 2nd in Command

Teachers pet

Fine ill give him a ten if their is the perfect reason to why all of the spectators remained silent and only gasped when one combatant got hurt

Sorry for not replying sooner!

This was a dynamite episode, and it's a great way to kick off the tournament. I loved all the interactions between the characters, but the best random line ever said has to be awarded to Bianca, lol...that was comedic gold

The fight between Milleena and Viper was pretty intense; I loved how Viper used his reptilian abilities to his advantage (until, of course, he got stabbed by Milleena), it was very interesting to see. The setting turned out to be perfect, the arena is a great amalgam of pitfalls and unknown advantages, it almost felt as though I were there with them!


Alright...enough gushing about the great fight (a nice long one, it seems like too ) and its amazing cliffhanger! Let's talk a tinsy bit about Davila

I loved how she was portrayed in this episode...she seems very cunning without being overly arrogant, and I like how she's trying to weasel her way into Luther's ranks...what exactly is she going to attempt? How will her plots interfere with the countless others that are running at the moment? I loved Vladimir's entrance via the terrifying flames...it was a nice touch, and very nice to visualize. I think our sorceress will be in a bit of trouble, but I have no doubt that she'll be able to get out of it in time to ruin something....

Logan's interactions with his sister were great, and made me actually like the character; it brought him some depth that he was lacking previously (imo).

I also like the quick cameos by Mace and Elandra, and Bianca's moment of tenderness...it almost makes one feel for the crazy 'dancer,' though I have no doubt that moment will be the last one.


Overall, great episode, and pretty decent art. I am going to be honest and say that I do not 100% like it, but it is a drastic improvement over the other sketches Leo has made, and so that made it all the more worth it.


BTW Leo, I'll be sending you a PM shortly. Great episode! 10/10 from me

Barakaz_Cuz



I think it was about time that she found out about Viro, or at least BEGAN to find out about Viro. We still can't tell how she truly feels about this creature's presence in Dimentia, but we can draw our own conclusions from the fact that she's about to put all trained Heiligian Guards in a mission to discover his hideout and kill him. Looks like she doeasn't sleep on business.



Viro's strange appearence and origin makes him a perfect candidate for the creepier scenes of the series. He does look like a character who popped straight out of some horror movie, like an experiment-gone-wrong.



I also think we can expect a lot to come from this tension that's being built up between Vice and Lara. Viro may be a little unhappy with following her orders, but Vice is actually doing something about it, whether that's a smart move or not. Only time will tell whether or not Lara has the ability to keep these guys under her control, and what drastic measures she'll take to ensure her power remains untouched.



We can see in this scene that what Davila's basically doing is digging into Maverick for some specific type of information. I'm not sure if anyone has fully caught on yet to what she's really trying to find out. Take a close look at the questions she asks, and judge for yourself as to what she really wants to know. Then, it'll be easy to speculate on her future goals, which seem obscure as of now.

But yes, she's surrounded by big obstacles, no matter what she's really planning. You got Lord Vladimir who seems to catch on to every move she makes, Hamon who actually seems completely loyal to Vlad so far, and Bianca, who has already (accidently) started butting in. I wonder how these "obstacles" will mess her up, if at all, in the near future?



That's a nosy-ass bird, isn't it? I'm surprised no one shot a projectile at it.

Logan and Millena really do have a strong bond. You can catch that vibe during their interactions with one another, but this time, it shows through without question. These two are here together, as an unrivaled duo: they don't know what danger awaits them in Dimentia, they don't know anyone but their own people... it's like (Even though they're royalty) they're alone in a sense, but together in another.



LOL!

I've never seen Lady Deathstrike, but I'll assume she's very cool.

GUSTAVE! :-O Here's some background information about him I created, Leo can decide to make it Canon or not, but I did it for fun:

Dimentian Crocodylidae- A native species of Dimentia, this aquatic reptile-like creature is mainly found in the tropic regions of the realm. They are carnivores, and mainly prey off of unsuspecting fishermen or any foolish person whom would roam their territory. It is said that they are the ancestors of the "Crocodile" of Earth. One whom roams the Dimentian Everglades is known as "Gustave" by the natives, being named after a Great Dimentian General whom legend says wresltled one by himself, killed it, and used its Hide as Battle Armor. Though it appears that he is slain by Viper in the 1st Battle of the Tournament, it is known that Gustave has an unnatural way of cheating death...

X_X !!!!! Gustav would be proud of the fame you've given him.



Thank you, B_C! I'm not a PhotoShop Wiz, so I couldn't come up with anything too !!!!, but I also thought it looked nice, and it's good to see images of the characters since it helps to make everything more "alive".



The sketches are really basic, especially since I'm only good enough at basic drawing and not at all coloring. Again, just a chance for everyone to actually SEE the characters in front of them rather than in their minds.



This really is a very good question, and something that I would also love to see some answers and opinions to! I actually had the idea of each person creating an image of a bio for their characters that includes who they are and what they've done so far in the series. Then, we could show off these bios in General Discussion and get people to open their eyes to the series, while giving them the chance to catch up without having to read 15 episodes. Let me know what you guys think of this idea, how we can get started, and/or if you have any others we should consider!

Thanks for bringing that up, B_C, and also for the incredible review!

Ermacsmainman



It's really important that Zale's relationship with Vincente comes across, because as we saw in this episode, it's what caused the "Hunt for Viro" to begin in the first place.

I also like the slight affection that sometimes pops up between the Dimentians, particularly Bianca/Serpen Kia/Viper. It's very engaging when we can witness some of the most "evil" characters exchanging some positive feelings. The bond that this trio has is also quite unique, since it differs from others like Lara and Luther, who seem to have a more "outgoing" outlook on what positive feelings are.



Vlad has a dark "atmosphere" about him, so I think it fits when he acts in sadistic sarcasm. It makes for a nice little cliffhanger, even though we can already foresee how "screwed" Davila really could be.



LoL! www.thesaurus.com ! But you're doing fine on your own.

I'm happy the "suspense" theme really came across during Viper's actions, since it's the main effect I was aiming for. If you can bare to put yourself in Millena's shoes during these scenes, you can almost feel how frightening it is to have an invisible murderer lurking around you, waiting to strike.



Well, the crowd wasn't at all silent, IMO. Their faint yells, shouts, and racket comes up quite a few times throughout Millena's fight, and everytime we cut to the crowd, some kind of uproar comes up. But then again, it would be too distracting and irrelevant to keep showing the crowd's reaction too many times, so that might be what gave you the feeling of them being too quiet.

Thank you for the review, EM, which is getting an excellent overhaul, lol! I also appreciate the feedback on the images, I'm glad you liked them so much!

Oh yeah, almost forgot! B_C, thanks for going to war over the .4 points missing from EM's rating with multiple stabs and growling, lol! ^_^!

Soul_Stealer



One of the best compliments I have ever received on my writing in the past has been being told that the reader could "feel like he/she was there", so I'm always happy when people are effected this way. It takes a lot of imagination and manipulation of words to describe such an action-packed chain of events, and I'm very glad it paid off.



I like to differ Davila to Lara in terms of their "plotting" tactics. One one side, we have Lara who's full of arrogance, is conceited as they come, and makes sure to let the world know just how much power she really has over it. Then, as you said, we have Davila, who is also manipulative, but is not afraid to take risks with those around her and submit herself to the situation at hand in order to attain her goals


As mentioned, Logan's bond with his sister was hinted at during their past interactions, and really hasn't been made 100% concrete up until this point, when her life could be at stake depending on the intensity of her fight against such a blood-thirsty creature as Viper.



I agree that they've improved a lot more, especially since my first sketches were all done quickly and under pressure of time, since I had introduced like, a dozen or so characters at once and needed to do their bios and images in extremely little time. Can't wait to see the quality of the sketches you'll be sending me! They better kick mine's ass >= O!!!

Thank you for the review, always looking forward to it.

I'd really appreciate it if you guys could give some thought to our advertisement methods, and how we can kind of spread this series a little throughout the forums! I'm sure we can come up with some orgasmic ideas if we put our heads together!

Also, I will be back soon to ask everyone a series-related question that I think will be very interesting!

Thanks again,

- Leo

Oh no, I'm slacking off. And courtesy of Streetking, I will give a short and sweet review like custom (That's right B_C, some of us will never change)

First, I'd like to say the tournament fight was simply amazing. How Viper was camofluaging (new word pplz) and predatoring the shit out of Millena. Then Millena started kicking ass with that staff/spear thingy. Then in the swamp.

Second, The Bianca quote had me dying, I couldn't breath. That was a great comical twist. I like your creativity, and your ability to go from action, to comedy, to romance, to horror. Great job.

Third, That Viro scene was kind of scary. Who am I kidding, that shit was very scary. I could picture it in my head, like some Hostel stuff. I like the gas, and again, the classic quote. You have a knack for those.

Fourth, and finally, Lord Vladmir and Davila. Now before I go into the happy marriage, I like the romantic twist with Maverick and Davila. Then, Maverick leaves, and Luther steps in. That shit was amazing. Davila is FUCKED now. Vlad saw it all. Go Vladdy, it's your birthday. lol. Overall, 10/10 (Would have gotten an eleven, but no Drake). EDIT: About the advertisements, maybe we could choose some of the best characters, make a thread at the General Discussion, and paste their bios and if someone who can photoshop well or just draw extremely well (no offense Leo, their great sketches) and post the pictures their to, give a basic overview of the story, and pow, I guarntee at least two readers.

Streetking - Creator of Drake (Got dibbs on Third in Command)

If you dont wanna make deep posts and reviews like the other half, it's your choice, though there's the possibility that it might get Drake some brownie points in the story.

I've created a sample "Bio Image" for Lara, to show you guys what I had in mind:

~ LARA BIO ~

Note that this bio explains all the basics you should know about Lara before diving late into the story: important past actions, what she is doing currently, and necessary traits she has. A random person could just read this bio and be able to deal with Lara as they read from Episode 15 on.

Of course, we would have to find some real-life pictures of everyone's characters. I already have a few for some characters, but not all. So if you like the idea of making these bios for General Discussion, then I'll ask you to find a "real-life" image of your character(s), or at least give me something to search for (actor name, actress name, model name, etc.)

Let me know,

- Leo

Leo, I love that bio. Great detail, and you described the most important event instead of leaving an abstract view. Good job.

Outstanding Bio Leo! With this, people can jump right into the Series from Episode 15! I also love how we are finding the "Real Life" versions of our characters to use for the bios, rather than sketches. Makes it more appealing, especially with such Hot Actresses/Models potraying the lovely ladies of DD. Can't wait to see the other Characters as well!